Winter_Webb
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Mood LOL
Thank you for your honest feedback. I fully understand that this story has ALOT of Grammatical errors that I nor my computer pick for some reason (My google doc is crap picking errors up for someone reason. As for the chapters that feel like essays I just uploaded another chapter with a different writing style is that the essay one or is it the first 3ish?
I LOVE the beginning, like- unexplainable love it. How the system is explained, how its thought out and created is fucking bloody awesome. And the the first chapters name- that got me, so unexpected yet correct from the first few sentences. How its written and how the world is created and the story grows- unbelievable 11/10 book should be printed and sold. And im not even done reading yet LOL
I love how u write!!! I love the story idea and how u create it over the chapters!! Most stories depend on their summary which usually is weird but urs was catchy!!
I really love the name Yuna I think it was spelled. I have never seen a name like this before and it makes the story really unique. So far I kinda like the maid, I know they arent the main character but just kinda how they graze the chapter with their character is chilly. As for the plot im very excited for chap 15!!.