Hey its me. So you have a nice length on chapters that fit your style, you kept it short but detailed enough to be great, you dont have to worry about the grammatics, as long as it is readable, great job there too. Try to upload regularely. This Story has a lot of potential. Nice paragraphs too. For a first Story you can be proud of. You can also look more about the person and worldbuilding to imagine everything better.

continue well my young padawan