Silver_Chaos77
It's been five years since I started reading, three years on Webnovel, and I write as a hobby, I especially like fan fics, western and Eastern fantasy as well as system novels. Anime and Manga Too.
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It's called logic, the fic isn't even 30 chapters in. It stands to reason that ANYONE who was an avid fan of the show and actually got to their world would want to meet them, criticizing that is just stupid. Especially since the storyline revolves around them. It's what he does afterwards that counts.
Also, the entire premise of the fic is for the MC to be prepared in advance for the events of the show, having him go down with the others would defeat the whole purpose and premise of the fic
I can recognise criticism when I see it, this isn't it, and it's common knowledge this is a fan fic as per the tag, you don't have to go on a whole self Monologue about it. I don't like what I did with the story progression, but the opening I will defend, as it's something unique and creative, not the same copy pasted formula, which you should appreciate but you clearly live in your own little world
I'll talk about what I found bad then about what I found good. Bad: First of all, the info dumps in the first 3 chapters are INSANE, 100 paragraphs plus of just listening skills and their uses, now after reading all that you expect to see them being used in a fight right? No. which brings me to my next point. Fights. They were boring, the MC didn't utilise even a tenth of the abilities he has, some contradictions happen that don't make sense which only serves to make the fight seem forced, for example fights he would easily win are blown out of proportion for no reason, I personally got very frustrated at that. He gets many OP abilities, then during fights it's as if he forgot they existed. Also, when a change of POV occurs, first person isn't used which makes things confusing at best. Good: The OG the writer added in aren't half bad, minimal to no spelling and grammatical mistakes, story development is great though forced at times, the chapters are long, the established world build is utilised well and you can tell some creative juices were spent on this. Changes: As the story progressed, the fights are still frustrating but the info dumps did get lighter. I would love if the author adopted the 'show not tell' policy, and train in writing fights scenes more to get better. At least use AI those fights really aren't readable. Do I recommend this? Well, make your own opinion of that and I hope this review/rant helped. ♡
Ever heard of , show not tell? At least have him use his skills in the fights, they are always underwhelming, he doesn't use his skills for all the hype that was put into them.
50 paragraph power up info dump incoming 😞
Well.....then why couldn't he have done that with ALL is attacks....
I'm not going to lie, this feels like it was written using chat gpt or something, if not I apologise, but nobody other than a 900 year old Sage speaks like that, especially not a reincarnated soul from modern days.
Fixed~ Thanks for pointing it out ♡
Weren't they all identical
This is one of the funniest shít I've ever read! The humour is golden!!~ While the power system is solid, there aren't any real struggles or difficulties in gaining Abilities. All his power is basically spoon fed to him. Not that I mind, but have him use his power.His abilities level up multiple times but us readers don't have a point of reference of just how strong they've become or what they're capable of since there are basically no fights as of chapter 18.I find the character dynamic marvelous, the dialogue amazing and most importantly funny AF.As for character development, not much but the chapters are still on the lower side so I'm waiting on it.The world setting isn't explained fully, which isn't really a bad thing since the author didn't do us dirty with an info dump we won't remember. I hope it slowly uncovers over time.Grammar and spelling barely have any mistakes if at all.I definitely recommend reading this![img=recommend]
It wouldn't work with the story's premise. The entire Advanced Preparation would be useless. I don't need to copy every other The 100 fanfic beginning. This is MY STORY which I wanted to have a unique opening.....great conversation
I thought the other picture make her out to be a little young, so..New Picture, pick what you prefer of the two.