awilson014

That’s a fair point on the body flicker comment and perhaps the vomiting was solely due to that. However I disagree with the rest. I don’t know why you thought my comment was heavy. Death is a normal and invetiable part of life, nothing heavy about it. I don’t get why most people and cultures have such a bad view of it. As for him being a seven year old with an underdeveloped brain the author has not at all made it clear that his stupidity is due to that. On the contrary they’ve implied the opposite with the fact that he was conscious in the womb before he even had a brain to think with.

Ive got a blindfold on. I’m eating steak one moment and the next I’m eating cardboard. That’s what reading this is like. I think the main problem stems from parts of it being dragged out and over explained. The character suffers from this as well and comes off as very dumb. Intelligence wise, I think it was implied or stated by the author they were supposed to be normal. Unfortunately they may as well be completely retarded. Usually with a dumb mc its meant to be funny or serve some purpose. This doesn’t do that. The mc is dumb for the sake of being dumb and does nothing other than increase the word count with nothing of substance. It’s so bad that I genuinely think the author did it in order to make the chapters longer. Theres plenty of rambling and needless explanations of things that you shouldn’t even need to think about. The mc doesn’t noticeably mature or change much. He starts out seventeen. He’s immature and childish. Although I think it’s amplified too much it can still be chalked up to him being seventeen. But even after mentally reaching his mid twenties there’s no sign of change whatsoever. He also underwent almost a year of complete isolation which was just glossed over for some reason. The actual character of the mc itself is poorly put together and I question how it even came about. While a few character flaws are welcome, making the character itself a flaw is most certainly not. He’s sensitive, a coward, a hero, and has an ego. None of these traits are bad by themselves but putting all of them on the same person makes no sense to me. Parts of the novel are interesting and worth reading, other parts are stale and have no value whatsoever. Before reading this I wasn’t sure it was possible to write something that was simultaneously great and terrible. While the character itself is unlikeable it’s not unbearable. The biggest problem is the stupidity that’s used to extend the chapters. If the unnecessary parts were cut down I’d probably have given this a five star. As it is now I wouldn’t recommend reading. It simply isn’t worth the annoyance it will cause.

No need to be embarrassed. If you had gotten that it was a joke you wouldn’t have asked about the schizophrenia. There was no aggressive intent behind my comment. I was just disagreeing with you about the stupidity being funny. I don’t know how it’s possible for you to find it funny either because ,like I said, I genuinely think it’s just a way to increase the word count.

I was making a joke that you’re seeing things… you know, cuz schizophrenics see things that aren’t there. Ironic since we’re on the subject of comedy. I don’t know how that flew over your head

Lmao that character does seem a little ridiculous thinking back on it

Do you have schizophrenia? Because I don’t see an ounce of comedy anywhere, the stupidity is just annoying really. I’m convinced the author is just using it as a way to pad the word count

? I took away the exact opposite conclusion from that

The mc knew they would be massacred. He’s already had 7 years to process this. This is an overreaction. Its worse when you consider that all those who died are strangers to him. Did you know about 100 people died in a fire during a wedding in Iraq about a year ago? The groom lost 15 relatives and the bride lost 10, including her mother and brother. Are you currently throwing up and consumed with grief over this information I’ve just told you? I highly doubt anyone reading this feels more than a little sad, if at all. You probably just thought “aw that sucks” and moved on with your day. This obviously isn’t a perfect example since the mc had foreknowledge on their deaths but you should be able to get my point. It’d be fine if he felt a little guilty I guess but this is needlessly exaggerated.

I think this exchange is much better than the other ones on the aspect of him supposedly being neither dumb nor smart. All the other previous ones just made him out to be a retard, this was much better in my opinion 👍

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