QuiteSarcastic
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Membaca buku-buku
Proof-reading is weak with this one.
It's most likely Grammarly's auto-correct, as "Petra" is a female name, which was most popular around the 60s or 70s. And I guess the correction software registers it to be so as well.
I've read the first 18 chapters, and I have to say that it's getting better and better. The fic is unique and has been well-paced up to now. The grammar is excellent, but there are a few typos here and there and perhaps a small mistake or two regarding structure, which by itself is great. The MC's abilities are growing to be more unique as the chapters go by, he is leaning toward the more overpowered side of things, but that is to be expected due to his "Wish". Overall, the fic is great, I'm looking forward to more.
Quality = OK-ish. There are plenty of typos and odd sentence structures in the majority of the chapters up to chapter 17. It's understandable, yes, but it's dumbed down so much that every logical action is replaced by the whimsical stereotype of the typical shonen protagonist who wants to bang his sister for some god-for-sake reason. -Stability: Ok. Story Development: There's lots to say about that, but it's mainly summarized in how I described the quality of the fic. Each chapter gives him a magnificent power boost, but the MC never improves. His actions grow dumber and dumber the further in you get. -Character Design: Meh, MC acts like he's afraid to go out the front door in fear of being crushed by almighty entities. -World Background: Cool, MC's world is DC, yet what does that mean? Oh, here's a random ass quest to go to a random world, almost like his chat group's worlds doesn't exist, and he has to cover grounds in a world that comes out of absolutely nowhere. Overall, this fanfic is overrated and does not belong in the top charts where it currently is. The plot is a lazy amalgamation of mixed-mashed worlds, and the author can't nail a single original character personality. They all go along like it is an acid-induced dreamscape where the MC collects his harem of useless nobodies because he needs to collect women en masse. -Harsh? Nah, especially not when the author wants to get paid for this drivel through p@treon.
And don't forget the fact that his AI already has "Conquered" the interwebs, so to say, and can gather blackmail on one of the richest individuals on his planet while securing him a massive amount of wealth to help secure himself if he only used 0,000001% of "Tony's" overall IQ.
"Immunity" be like:
...Hacked the internet? Seriously? Why would anyone need to "Hack" the internet?
Then what stops you from instead changing it from "older brother" to sibling? :P
I had to leave a review after seeing so many people take this fanfiction so personally when it reached the top lists. -Writing Quality: Simply amazing. The storytelling is so smooth and mixes well with the characters. There are no typos, and the sentence structuring is top-notch. It is legit one of the top fics on this entire platform in terms of quality. -Updates: Quite often, considering how long the chapters are. -Story Development: From chapter 1 to chapter 39, there's been a constant development among the characters; personalities clash and make the comedy fit so much better. -Character Design: I'd say this is the author's best quality. There are so many different characters, and even if they might not be canonically accurate at times, you get to see dozens of personalities improve and actually turn a bad time into a good time due to the MC's quirks. -Overall, I think the hate this fic gets is unjustified, especially so when "tastes" in a relationship are the crux of the so-called hate. It's a goddamn fanfic, not an offense to a non-existent love life. -Especially so when people tend to look so hard into things that they actually take shit personally. Just skip the R18 chapters if it hurts your ego so much...
I already feel good about this fic. An author with good taste knows to shy away from such a nightmare-fueled reality such as all the consuming ching chong!
I think the bot had a stroke?
So... ChatGPT is hard at work huh...
His grandfather seems to be one of those bullshido grandmasters on youtube, however, he's just a normal soldier who became intimate with the avatar and suddenly got spirit cancer...
He's one of those... you know, those nasty basement-lurking harem fanatics who believe that a relationship like a harem represents just "Works"
I've read the last few chapters, and I think you are doing well, maybe shift around with how you structure sentences, like "Finally I did this---" Into something akin to..: And when I finally reached this point, I did this---" Which will make it seem more descriptive and less stiff. Perhaps extend the chapters and leave some explanations in a small A/N at the bottom part of the chapter.
That makes two of us, and I completely agree. However, I based my reply on the fact that this fic did not manage to reflect her character in the slightest, making her seem like a Dumbledore after saying this calmly: "Harry, DID YOU PUT YOUR NAME IN THE GOBLET OF FIIAH!?"
Seriously, why all this backpeddling in regard to information? Is it THAT hard to reach a proper word count without puking out the exact same words over and over?
If you couldn't understand that I meant fanfic and that "Novel" was just me saying the wrong word, and no, when this comment was created, there was absolutely no statement about power levels in the bio.