WhiteMooN
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This world is a cultivation world, and Mandarin is the common language there. "Xiao'Er" is also very common name for a girl ('Er is added to show intimacy P.s: "Xiao'Er" is not a name, rather a nickname.
Wonderful thing you have done, fellow Daoist. I bless you with success.
Well, a five-star review from the Author himself, Yay. Anyways, This time, I no longer intend to leave my work incomplete. Believe me, you'll be able to see the end. (unlike my other novels.) Also, if there are any loopholes in the logic or any plot hole in the story, you can point that out. (I will patch them as soon as possible.) Btw, I will try my best to update this novel every week. (no promises though) Anyways, it feels good to be back.
What about the other 40%, Sensei?
here
well, here's a piece of advice. To make the MC seems more intelligent and cunning, you don't have to write entire paragraphs of his inner monologue and plans. Just make it seem that the MC is just average while prove his intelligence by his actions. It is weird when he's bitching in his mind while telling the readers about his plans. It would be better if you give a plot twist to some actions which are done normally, Example: "Please turn on the TV" A Dumb MC said. "(Name of the side-character)" The Smart MC closed his eyes and said, "Turn it on." Here, He MC did not specify the thing, and left it to others to think. To me, an intelligent MC would never reveal his plans in detail. He would just give orders according to the situation after giving out the basics of the so-called plan. P.S, A smart person would never interact with so-called cannon fodder to prove his point or just to face-slap them. ... That's it.
But with Black-red outlines and fire instead of ice.
Gojira
Fuck-you! You've successfully ruined my life... 177013, 215600, 230053, 215600. 228922, and please, never search 4299. You've been warned. If you want to stay innocent, never, I repeat, never search these unholy words. Warning: These shits are ****ed up
Maybe a color change?
At first I was thinking this...
this?
Is this one good? or other
Gojira
I did upload it once... Maybe there was someinternet problem
This looks cool.