BreathingMoon
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Alright: I love the dramatic tension these first chapters set, which is very hard to establish and maintain in certain novels for the most part. Generally, overtime I'd expect it to become a little off-putting, so I pray you manage that well as the series continues. After this spike in tension with the opposing forces, I'd always recommend keeping a dark- gritty tone. I'd recommend using more 'Dirty' feeling words to describe this world to fit the tension, as in litterally describing everything as dusty or damp- something like that. As for everything else, it's quite good.
I hope you enjoy this series, it gets even more ridiculous later down the line! And apologies in advance that I didn't finish it, I'm working on a half sequel/reboot.
Thanks for reading and commenting!
Thank you for leaving so many positive comments :) I know this novel is a little off at times, but I sincerely hope you enjoy it!
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