WyattJaymes54
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this is a very good story. however you have problems with missing words in sentences. I suggest reading the sentences out loud to yourself and adding the words that flow into the sentence. Other than that this is a great read. you have exceptional talent. Your characters are really well developed. I really enjoyed reading this. I can't wait to see more from you.
You have a good story here. The only problem here is that you have so many misspellings and grammar issues that it's messing with the flow of the story. All in all, this is a great book. It has a good writing style and it is a good idea. Keep writing! I can't wait to see more from you!!!
This is a good story. The idea is there. The only problem is the flow of the sentences. You have a good writing style. But you need to read the sentences out loud to yourself cuz you're having problems with words need to be added into the sentence or words being in the wrong spot. Other than that it was a good read. keep writing. Can't wait to see an update for the story!!
This is my first time reading a fan fic, So bare with me. I absolutely loved the storyline and how you gave Issac a second chance. You don't give a reason why he was hospitalized though which is key to to the story and his [img=recommend]redemption and why the judge saw that he deserved a second chance even if it is in a villain's body. Otherwise this story has great potential and I enjoyed reading it
This is very good. The world you crafted quite good. This is a great book and has good potential. I can't wait to read more. But one thing I would like to know is why Issac has been hospitalized all his life. His he physically/mentally ill? What are his thoughts behind being in this predicament?
This is really good. You have crafted a good world for your characters. But the thing this story lacks is conflict. Yes her lover is Dracula, but how does that pertain to the story? Is Dracula the villain? If so, explain on how it came to be that the MC fell in love with the enemy. This story has great potential. I will definitely add it to my collection.
I loved the quote and the meaning behind it. But, I felt like it was taking you too long to introduce the story and yet when you did, I was amazed by your talent with dialogue. The only thing I recommend is to read your dialogue out to yourself and try to make it feel more natural.
This a very good story. I very much like how you drew your readers into the story. Your characters are so life-like. But they lack emotion and its very hard to see where your characters are coming from. I suggest including the characters' thoughts and emotions to those thoughts and the emotions to what's happening around them.