Mayline
Thirsty for more. I can illustrate my novels with AI art. I love doing this. Ask me!
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Good day! I'd love to reply to your review but the computer won't let me. If you deleted it, know it is much welcomed in any form, a critic is more important if it's negative. Here's what I planned to reply: Actually I am reading and keeping every review. Yours, as bad as it can look will be fairly given light as it can only allow me to progress if I correct the mistakes you've highlighted. Up to the fifth chapter you've passed through the long intro (world building and sympathise with the mc, learn which side character is important). A violent incident caused Arthur to have ahead trauma, I believe it's not as readable as I thought. I'll work on it. Up do date, the 69th chapter is under writing, the few ten-ish I am bottling up are ongoing changes as I advance through the story. I thank thee for your time and sincerity. I hope to see you later.
Ah nevermind 8 meteors and 9 elements?
not dark ? woat!
That's suspicious
Oh boy isn't it relieving
We can read his thoughts out loud at any time, but I don't understand the need to have a guard in front of a school
I believe you need to focus on one tense for your storytelling. Some phrases are grammarily incorrect because of that. also you have a lot of capital letters everywhere, it does not respect the ponctuation. It saddens me because your first chapter is overall poetic and extremely heavy to read, it's a great job
using blood as ink is very emo like also using blood to draw anything makes it stink really hard
this is original, quite a short premise but I hope to find the kind of mood in that old cartoon (Treasure Planet) hope to read more soon, this is some great reading~
This mind game was complicated for this tiny brain of mine. I wonder what could have happened if Nathair was the intruder. He gauged their ages sure but if he came across people extremely different from him then the mind-game could've have ended up much worse (or so I hope)
Ah I got lost, I don't know precisely who's talking
The title of the chapter, I'm dead
Oh boy I had a good laugh
Gantz vibes
Hold'up he ready to fight? What kind of company did he take back from his uncle?