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"Raging face" ????
Extremely mediocre book. It's legible so it's better than a lot of stories on here, but everything else is kind of a mess. Every other sentence ends in an exclamation point to try and create fake excitement. Please stop saying "RUMBLE!" in completely random spots that make zero sense.
Hey Mr. Author. One small tip. Just in this first chapter there's a big glaring error: You lack word diversity. In about the first 20 paragraphs you say 'Qin Yi' in like 18 of them. It also happens later in the chapter with a dozen or so paragraphs starting with or containing 'Qin Yi'. Also looking at the start of chapter 2 you do it more. You need to diversify a little bit or it gets tiring to read very quickly.
What happened to "I would be taking advantage of his niceness tomorrow"
It's a little strange that three years have gone by and scavengers haven't looted an abandoned blacksmith....
Spears aren't really one handed weapons while Swords are....
That's not how physics work lol....
Gave it a dozen or so chapters -- the translation is pretty awful with large parts sounding like its straight up mtl. Based on what I read the original work seems pretty awful too. in a dozen chapters there was no character or story development. Not even any fighting. Just whoa I got VR and joined a game two weeks passed and I hit max level repeat 3x. Even though things started to pick up I couldn't continue with how bad the translation is
He basically said "technically its the norm in most novels that when you have a super op ability the CD is long"