IsekaiMan1

these short don't show any real progress

longer chapters

if you're here for the r18 they are paywalled

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the dialogue is so awkward

one chapter and the grammar is worse

u need something to separate different scenes like ------‐---------

needs a few minor edits

the story is basically just a bunch of filler there's slow progress to the story even with 100 chapters now and the author is just following canon with just insignificant changes kids speak like they are adults even when they're like 8 feels like someone took an mtl story and edited to take out the propaganda and then posted it and slapped a p a t r e o n it and said 'done'

bro reading about oc's in a fanfiction isn't really fun especially this early in the story and the slow progress in plot