Leonholdt

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2018-04-16 BergabungGlobal

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Leonholdta month ago
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hes forcing plot and events to make up for his poor story and world building.
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Reincarnated With Three Unique Skills
Fantasi · Elias_Nightwalker
Leonholdta month ago
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The author is probably 10 or 15 and very much incapable of understanding REAL interactions and keeping to a plan.
"Alright, introduce me to your friends," Ethan said, deciding to give her proposal a chance.
Reincarnated With Three Unique Skills
Fantasi · Elias_Nightwalker
Leonholdta month ago
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My 5 yr old had more consistent continuity.
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Reincarnated With Three Unique Skills
Fantasi · Elias_Nightwalker
Leonholdta month ago
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And a rather large plot hole. considering in the first chapter, you stated she became a zombie. Now, she was killed in front of him by people who, by this own account, wouldn't even bother with such a reportedly pathetic individual.
Lyerin's face twisted with rage as the memory replayed in his mind. He had been helpless, powerless, as Lucius mocked him, taunted him with every blow. "You're nothing, Lyerin," Lucius sneered. "You'll never be anything more than a slave. A pawn in this world. Your mother knew that. That's why she was so easy to kill."
LEVEL EVERYTHING UP in my Eldritch Tribe
Fantasi · Notorious_911
Leonholdta month ago
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Fells frighteningly forced...again. There is no real reference that isn't a deluge of silliness to create background for an amuss8ngly weak willed snake of an MC. I'd enjoy it more if it at least seemed well thought out.
Suddenly, there was a demonic smile painted in his expression but he immediately noticed it and suppressed it.
LEVEL EVERYTHING UP in my Eldritch Tribe
Fantasi · Notorious_911
Leonholdta month ago
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pathetic forced conflicts.
Victor's smile turned menacing. "I know what you're doing, Lyerin. Your desire to create a powerful tribe to strengthen your army is clear. I had comrades who attempted similar feats in the past."
LEVEL EVERYTHING UP in my Eldritch Tribe
Fantasi · Notorious_911
Leonholdta month ago
Balas Daoists7udMy
I'm going to go with both since the entire story so far is forced, jumps around a lot, and, like most, "translated" novels gives little to no real background or info
The memory of the man's mocking laughter echoed in his mind. His mother, Lina, had always been his anchor, the one person who had given him strength.
LEVEL EVERYTHING UP in my Eldritch Tribe
Fantasi · Notorious_911
Leonholdta month ago
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considering decay doesn't actually start to be noticeable this soon, that conjecture and theory are untested and unproven.
He continued, painting a vivid picture of the horrors outside. "I've seen entire neighborhoods overrun in minutes. People turning into flesh-eating monsters almost instantly after being bitten. We tried to contain it, but it's spreading too fast. The streets are filled with these... things. They don't decay like traditional zombies, but their eyes, mouths, and ears ooze this black, tar-like substance. It's a nightmare."
LEVEL EVERYTHING UP in my Eldritch Tribe
Fantasi · Notorious_911
Leonholdta month ago
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guess ol boys name is brother instead of whatever it is
Nita said Lein's name in a deep voice...
Floating Island - Triple S Talent
Game · Riski_Bambang
Leonholdta month ago
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what group? when? where? there is no consistent timeliness. Has it been weeks? a day or two? this is...poorly done.
"This group I originally created to find equipment, I know them all. Almost all the good stuff that isn't on the market I got from them."
Floating Island - Triple S Talent
Game · Riski_Bambang

Derelict Core

!!AUTHOR NOTE!! There will be no set release schedule. This is a free fiction I do for a hobby. Like it or don't, that is up to you. I will NEVER respond to the readers, the story is already planned and done in my head. Writing it is the only thing. Enjoy. !!END AUTHORS NOTE!! Awakening to a new life when you believed your dreams, dreams you never understood were your life. Realizing you were an odd glowing gem like object and that you had the ability to create, repair, and improve upon things that were designated in your domain. Life was strange for me, waking up as I did. No real memory, odd snippets of knowledge intruding into my thoughts that I had no idea where they even came from. Relearning what emotions were? This is my journey, my struggle to learn and grow.

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Progenitor System

How would you feel if you were reborn against your will into a new world? To have that choice ripped away from you by one God or another? I can tell you I was pissed beyond belief at the fact I had the choice taken from me and displayed that anger rather violently. So now I find myself in a new world, living a new life with the people who birthed me. People I do not truly care about. One of only two plus' in this is the fact my parents run a Monster Farm. The second is that I seem to have been granted a sort of System, the Progenitor System. It allows me to Create, Combine or Improve Creatures. This is limited by my Systems level, but it has kept me sane so far. Only time will tell if I will make this new life something worthwhile. (Still a piss poor Synapsis. I'll improve it at a later date.) --------------------------AN--------------------------- This fiction is a hobby, it will be updated only when I feel the urge to write, or the desire. My life, public and private will always take precedence so I will give no release date promises, ever. I do not want, desire, or need those Power Stones people use to vote either. If you like the fiction you like it, if you hate it you hate it. It does not affect me one way or the other. Enjoy.

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Ring Mancer

Kidnapped by a Goddess and blackmailed into servitude after ten years of freedom. The basics of my life after dying. My choice of 'boons' are the only thing I could initially control. Now with these ten years of freedom I will create an Empire or information and secrets to ensure my 'Mistress' goals are properly completed. All for the sake of a child I will never see again.

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