Avengtank

IS IT brief seconds or is it half a day?? decide please

most fanfic authours forget why readers read fanfics. too many lossing fights gets boring when from a fanfic the readers expect power fantasy or whatever the orginal novel didnot include.

yes i know u don't care , its just a review of what I thought. I know writing something is hard but when you writing for yourself , it is ok. But if you want more readers to read your story and make it popular at-least you have to avoid some controversies. If you make readers discourage to continue forward in the first 9 chapter , it does not make you a good writer. Its Just a constructive criticism. Any ways enjoy.

The fanfic would be much nicer if it involves different anime world hopping and with different anime characters. The Original Ben 10 story have not much depth to the story. Ben10 got popular due to steady introduction of different aliens and their abilities. But in this fanfic, we already know what the aliens are and what they can do and with the system rewards, their abilities kinda feel redundant or not utilised properly. Also,the the fanfic is in Ben10 world, which does not draw much attention from the readers due to the lacklustre and not exciting adventures in the Ben10 world. Omnitrix is OP by itself; it doesn't need any external abilities to make it interesting. What the author could do is introduce different elements to the story by visiting different worlds of games, anime and movies to make the fanfic interesting.

The fanfic is interesting to be honest. The rating is that low is also justifiable. The author messed up in few places of the fanfic. 1st: The templates he got are too powerfull but it seems that author nerfed them way too much. For example Ulquiorra is way too powerfull than what its shown here and Ulqiorra have his 3rd form too from the mobile game but even if u exclude the third form he is one of the powerfull template. Also Minato is not really one of the strongest template without his ninetails which the author seems to misunderstand. The templates are too many and are severely unused with their potential. 2nd: Way too many templates and their uses are few and the MC becomes normal human with too much magic with out takeover magic. 3rd: Author left Jellal alive which is one of a big cons , even if author dnt want harem route , still leaving jellal alive and future romance with Erza leaves a bad taste with the readers in a Fanfic. We dnt want to see others love life, we want MC life. 4th: Even with all the flirting with all the other girls like Lucy , Erza, Cana if the author is pushing no harem route then many readers including myself get annoyed. If the author wants no harem then he should have made it seems like it from the start.

its was interesting concept and the begining was very good until he joined luffy's pirate crew which makes it extremly boring for me. we read fanfics to add more to the world of onepiece than to follow the adventure and paths like the manga or anime. Again this would have been a great fanfic but author choice was not good.

i have read uptill around 270 chapters. This story would have been awesome if it focused on one aspect like technology. But the inclusion of cultivation world or the magic world feels unnecessary. Sometimes i am reading a tech kingdom building story and next moment i am reading cultivation story which breaks the immersion in a particular story line. But i have to give credit to the author , his Tech world story building is very nicely done. Thought in the start of the novel it might feel very very slow but it picked up nicely. Another thing is that i am at 270+ and there are no romance , not once. It feels like the protagonist is not human. Sometimes the protagonist feels like he have no actual goals.

very less ben 10 fictions are there in these sites. So people devour even garbage.

what a dumb thing to say, if i dnt like a praticular author i will not read their story???? The author might improve or other story of author might be good. Damn these sites are full of brainless people.

pretty dumb to consider this peak. I guess you didnot even read all the way and just commented.