Because it's only you

A bit too early to see how the story will develop, but so far, it is quite nice. I am waiting to see how the story develops further down the road, and will leave another review later. So far, the meeting of the ML and FL is slightly cliche, but that's what we readers live off, right? xD I am waiting to see how further interactions go, but the writing style thus far is smooth, though there are a few grammatical errors. Particularly, I like the way you used the flashback earlier in Chapter 1. Hoping to see more soon! Keep up the good work, author! :)

This novel is already laying a firm foundation for future development. The story seems well thought out and at 4 chapters is already entertaining. There are some glaring grammatical issues and a number of run on sentences. You can tell that English is not the author's first language. All of that aside it looks like an interesting read. I will continue reading to better see the release stability and also to see the interactions between the MC's. You should try to improve your sentence structure a little bit but you should definitely keep up the good work.

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There were 4 chapters at the point of this review. Writing Quality: There are a few grammatical mistakes. As this is the first attempt at writing, it is to be expected that it takes time and experience to get a flow going when writing. Although there are a few times where you get slightly taken out of the story, it does not take you long to enter the created universe again. Stability of updates: I read all four chapters in one go, but from looking at the update dates, it seems as if it does take a bit of time for chapters to be updated, but that is to be expected as well of a new writer. Story development: I quite like the premise and the plot so far. Of course, it is quite a bit too early to say exactly what is going to happen, but it is very enjoyable so far. I will definitely be glad to continue following it. Character design: Again, it is very soon to say anything special about the characters. They are likeable and I enjoy following them, but I do not know how long it will take for me to get more familiar with them. World background: Once more, it is a bit too early to say anything, but what has been shown is quite familiar and quite well explained

Writing Quality 5/5 What can I say? It's pretty much as fluent as one can go. I can understand the story and its progression. Small grammar mistakes but everyone makes those. Stability of Updates 3/5 Now don't get me wrong, this story has 3 chapters atm. But I can see that there was a pretty solid gap between chapter releases. I myself am also not good with stability hehe so don't take it as something bad. Story Development 4/5 Whilst it is pretty fluent, I sometimes have trouble finding my way back in the story. Could it be the sentence layout? I don't know. The story progresses at just the right pace and has lots of elements to keep you bussy. Character Design 4/5 I love that the MC has the same goals as me. I love programming and do so everyday. The other charachters are a little less fleshed out though. No worries, it's easy to just add a few unique lines to each of them to make them stand out more. World Background 4/5 While the story focuses on the world that influences the MC, I'm pretty sure that's all that is required for this story to work. Some details could be described better, I can't remember which ones though. Conclusion: whilst the chapters have a gap, this story still shows lots of potential in being a gem.

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Hi friends 😊 Shamelessly rating myself 😜... So let me tell you few things about the story... So the story in the beginning isn't going to be very fast forward when it comes to romance between the ML and FL because I want to first create the proper scenario.... So the Romance between the ML and FL won't be much in the beginning...I want to create proper way in which they will fall in love with each other since my story won't be a "love at first sight " types... But as the story will progress their romance will also start... 😊 And Thanks for giving my novel a chance...

I like the character development in the beginning. it really helps the reader make a connection with the main character. I am looking forward to how the relationship between Elsa and Mr. Whatever develops. The writing quality is good. it easy to read and has a nice pace.Cant wait for the next chapter

Alright so there is a story but the lack of detail of all your characters and surroundings makes it seem like a report. You did improve in the last chapter when you finally gave your ML and his assistant some life. Go back re do all your chapters and give that attention to your FL, when she becomes speechless while she meets the ML describe his face. Example. She became stunned. She came face to face to man that was beyond handsome. His face looked to be perfectly chiseled from white marble (or stone), his dark hair was neatly brushed to the side (or back), his neatly trimmed beard (or stubble) perfectly emphasized his sensual lips but what caught her words in her throat were his long eyelashes and blue eyes. Which stared back at her with doubt, mystery and mischievous intelligence. His lips slightly turned upwards in a mocking smile and in an alluring voice he said. (Insert speech) The reason for adjectives and descriptive words is to make your reader feel like they have gone into the world you have pictured in your head. However you do not have to keep re describing your characters, you can do a big one at the beginning and later on emphasize a couple of features every once in a while when you want something to happen between characters. Next you repeat lot of the same things or your grammar is off. Give you chapters a little bit more love, they do not have to be lengthy it is your decision on how long or short your chapter should be. Once you get into writing you'll notice how you've improved and probably not get the real hang of it until 30 chapters in (or sooner depending if you take advice) and even then go back and re read your chapters. There is no crime in doing more editing. Last bit of advice. Don't let negative comments or have people to tell you to stop writing get you down. We all have our preferences and that's okay. Your reason for writing is your own and if you love what your doing then do it. Nothing is worse then killing a story because you lost your confidence in it. If you do want to stop end the story quickly and let your characters live, leaving them in limbo is a sad thing.

The story is updating at a good speed and I really like your writing style.. The characters seem to be powerful in their own areas and it is really going to be fun seeing them together..

At the time of writing the review, only 4 chapters had been posted. Overall, the story has potential and will develop as new chapters are loaded. At this stage, not much can be said. Some grammar mistakes (spellings and tenses) are there which could be minimized to some extent by using a grammar checker or someone to edit. We all make mistakes. The description is vivid and realistic. The story is developing well and the future chapters will take the story forward. The novel is an enjoyable read.

Here we go. Before I start, I'd like to suggest something. Don't put something talking about how bad of a writer you are and that you're not a native speaker where your synopsis is meant to be. You're driving away readers. If you must, put them in a author's note, or at the end of the synopsis. Writing quality Quite good for a non-English speaker. I'd suggest to learn more about grammar and punctuation, or use something like grammerly. You tend to use a lot of elli**is, which are the ... Watch out, as normal ellipses are only three dots. Any more and your writing feels messy. Using elli**is in writing is kind of a oomph sorta thing, it sounds like everything is uncertain and there are unnecessary pauses. Maybe add more descriptions? There were some oddly worded sentences that couldve been worded better, as well as some questionable dialogue(here's where the elli**is really took away any of my good feelings towards the FL. It made her sound a bit slow and almost as if she was unable to speak properly) It's readable though. The mistakes doesn't take much away from the story. I like the usage of first person. You don't see that a lot on this site. Updates 5 stars in good faith. Not going to say much because I too used to have problems with updating Story development So far, not much has happened. To be fair, there's only been three chapters. We do get a sliceful of FL's back story. Right now, it's at the brink of just introducing the MCs. Character design FL- as I said earlier, whatever hopes I had for the FL went out the window following her slow dialogue. It got better though, as the story went on. She is a bit head strong, but I haven't really gotten much of her personality set down. ML- seems OK. Still wonder why he gave the other girl the money, obviously she would latch onto him. You'd think that for a CEO, he'd have been able to figure that out before giving the money away. And that's pretty much everyone noticeable. World building Not a lot of world building. All there was was a country A which FL got a degree from. Cool. But even in today's world, each and every country is different from each other. What makes your country tick? Describe it! Describe the city, what the FL sees, hears, smells as she walks down the sidewalk. There's only been three chapters, so you can't really do a lot of world building at this point in time. I'm assuming its a mirror image of our Earth though. Sorry if this was a bit harsh. Don't take it to heart. Your story has good potential, it just needs some fixing.

The story overall has its potential, but needs major revisions. I have already left review on chapter one in the comment section Chapter 3: Revision needed Chapter 4: omit the emoji Please take into consideration my comments regarding your story. I hope to see you improve! <3

Writing: 4 It's pretty good for an non-native English speaker. The majority of the mistakes are minor such as punctuational, mostly in the form of commas when using conjunctions. The rest are just awkward phrasing from not being familiar with English grammar such as "But still I fell from the ground." It should be I feel "to" the ground. One can't fall from the ground, from is saying that I fell from this point (the ground) to the (supposed) ground, which doesn't make sense. Another example is "Then I came to my senses and thanked." It's just missing thanked "him" or the person being thanked. Little things overall that an editor could fix. Updates: 5 It's a one chapter challenge, so... Character: 4 There's a decent fleshing out of the MC in the given short chapter. Story, World: 3 Again, because it's short, this is hard to judge since little of the story and world has been explored. Likely, this will be better with more chapters. As it stands, the story hasn't progressed anywhere except the meeting of the possible ML. For the world, instead of saying "Country A" just make up an actual country rather than using letters. This isn't good for story immersion. Better yet, as this is a modern story, use a real place in the world. It's okay if the details of the location aren't completely correct--most people wouldn't know anyway. 3.8 Overall.

Review as of c1, The story has great potential. The author needs to edit it though, it looks like they used a phone which auto-corrected most of the words. But I really like the story, and I'm going to follow it. Good luck Author hope it finishes well.