Another War

I enjoyed the story, Sev. It's good! :) The novel's plot is strong. It's promising so far. Character design is good as well because they feel alive and relatable. There is also an element of surprise and originality in this novel. I can feel the hard work and effort that was poured into this novel, so I give this story a rating of 4.2/5. I give the story's World Background a 5/5, because of how it lured me in to the story. The rest is 4/5 because there is a lot of room for improvement that still needs to be worked on. Like minor grammar errors, for example. Also, I hope you complete this story in the future. Since it's your first official story (feel free to correct me if I'm wrong), I'm sure it has a special place in your heart. As a fellow (new) writer, I'm hoping that you finish this story with no regrets and become a better one after it! :)

Interesting story. The premise is the kind that make you want to see what will happen later. It's beautifully done. The character personality are clear and it's easy to distinguish them. Good work

This story starts out with some amazing description as well as a sense of intrigue. It captures the reader's attention right away and then gets into some more relatable characters.

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The writing style is quite easy to read. However it would seem better if the story was descriptive at some parts and if the pace was much slower. Anyway, good job!

Its great story so far and another book that's easy to understand. Like the other peeps says, your improvement by every chapter was a great achievement! But improve more and more and maybe you'll be the one of the top authors in webnovel^^.

In a world where specialized handheld weapons instantly appear, what does that make of your life. How much war would take you away? How much outside influence of assigned personnel would make you regret human contact?

First of all the story has potential the way it's written, I agree to all persons who gave suggestions above in other reviews. The mythology portrayed is wonderful though I don't know much about this and perhaps that's the reason why it intrigued me the most. The only flaw is with the extra fast pace and other such things as using pronouns and certain things that dragged the story down because of lack of world background. It isn't clear where the action took place and the whereabouts of MC is also vaguely discussed. Everything went like a tornado without any explanation of events, which brought down the interest and that's the thing should be corrected.

The novel draws on local mythology fairly well and the actions scenes are quite distinctive. The writing could use a little polishing- but the novel is still quite enjoyable.

As far as I have read so far, this novel appears to be the story of a boy being transported into a magical, apocalyptic world that has been ravaged by monsters. As the boy gets saved by a girl monster slayer, he himself gains a similar power to fight them off. Seeing this, he joins her in an academy of sorts that trains slayer. It's not the most creative of plots, which makes it a bit difficult to latch onto. As I was reading, I felt that there was just something missing, a unique gimmick, a hook persay, that would draw in the reader to click the 'Add to Library' button. I'm not saying at all that the plot is uninteresting, in which I do see potential. But there seems to be a lack of something eyecatching, the moment that makes you think, I want to read more. With the large variety of novels that use similar tropes, the author should think carefully how to distinguish itself from others. Some people may disagree with me on this, but I personally did not see that moment. The writing itself is decent, but I would be careful with your sentence flow, which tends to repeat and be simplistic. One example is how you often start sentences with, "MC does this or he sees that." Vary the flow a bit.

Still just 7 chapters so far. What I like is that the Author used mythology as the world background of the story. It was quite rare to find a novel heavy with mythology and technology merging. Style are fine but I suggest you to be quite consistent on long or short paragraph. The long one is quite annoying to read and the one line paragraph feels incomplete for some reason. Grammar are good, not much mistake and readable.

Honestly, I'm still in th phase of getting to know the book and right now, It's hard for me to give a review but lemme sum it up. 1. Its creatures are very unique. I think it's based on Filipino folktales right? If it's me, I'll ponder for at least a week whether I could continue a book like this. 2. Grammatical glitches but that's just fine. 3. Because its settings is kind of complex, I suggest that you describe them (surrounding, people, etc.) as intricate as posiible but not to the point of info dump. 4. Put footnotes, especially about the creatures you used (their backgrounds) so you don't need to mention it in the later chapters and prevents info dumps.

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