Great so far. writing needs some fine tuning. minor phrasing error. update... I would prefer more frequent world and character design seems good so far. 4/5 for character. Depending on how the story goes this can be either good fanfic or mediocre. Please gor the love of everything good in this world, DO NOT MAKE THE MC A SYSTEM SLAVE OR SYSTEM DEPENDENT .
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