Review Detail of 1emanresU in Star Wars: Senator
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I tried this story again because It has a unique premise and I believe that if it was written by a competent author then this could have been one of the best star wars fics ever but it is not. The story is not engaging at all because it has no stakes and the MC faces no challenges, this is exemplified in the Kuat Drive Yard chapter where the MC recruits the best starship designer they have with no effort, no discussion, no trade, no nothing, it just happens because the author wants it to. Next he says he can just buy a whole starship manufacturing corporation for 200 million (this is pennies compared to what he's been throwing around) the author just hands his SI everything on a platter because he's to useless to make these things happen organically. Don't get me started on Blissex and his daughter calling the MC's designs genius, they're not even designs, just drawings of the hulls of cannon starships (since if he can actually design starships then he doesn't need Blissex). In short, the author is too unintelligent to write a smart MC so he compensates by making every other character a slackjawed, drooling moron and artificially removing every obstacle in his path. Do not waste your time on this.
Star Wars: Senator
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1emanresU:Please read my comment properly before commenting again, if you had done so in the first place you would have seen that I took issue with the MC facing no challenges and having everything he wants handed to him on a silver platter by the author so if anything, my problem is that the pacing is too fast. As for giving the author 'time to write' I don't see how that would resolve any of my issues since they aren't necessarily with the direction of the story but rather with the author's writing ability which I don't see him improving anytime soon (especially if people refuse to point out the glaring flaws in his work). TLDR your indignation is unjustified and you clearly can't read well, probably why you're so quick to defend this dumpster fire.image
Please read my comment properly before commenting again, if you had done so in the first place you would have seen that I took issue with the MC facing no challenges and having everything he wants handed to him on a silver platter by the author so if anything, my problem is that the pacing is too fast. As for giving the author 'time to write' I don't see how that would resolve any of my issues since they aren't necessarily with the direction of the story but rather with the author's writing ability which I don't see him improving anytime soon (especially if people refuse to point out the glaring flaws in his work). TLDR your indignation is unjustified and you clearly can't read well, probably why you're so quick to defend this dumpster fire.
Erik_D:It is 18 chapters long bro give him time to write or do you want the story to be finished in 25 chapters? Don't come back if you don't like it.image
1emanresU:Please read my comment properly before commenting again, if you had done so in the first place you would have seen that I took issue with the MC facing no challenges and having everything he wants handed to him on a silver platter by the author so if anything, my problem is that the pacing is too fast. As for giving the author 'time to write' I don't see how that would resolve any of my issues since they aren't necessarily with the direction of the story but rather with the author's writing ability which I don't see him improving anytime soon (especially if people refuse to point out the glaring flaws in his work). TLDR your indignation is unjustified and you clearly can't read well, probably why you're so quick to defend this dumpster fire.image
what you are doing is destructive criticism and it does not help that you are just telling him it sucks, yes you've made your point with where it is bad. Tell him how he could improve his way of writing or storytelling. If you want to read something more professional, then suggest you either get yourself a real book or one of those apps with real books from long time authors. You should also work on your criticism, so that it may help not destroy it.
1emanresU:Please read my comment properly before commenting again, if you had done so in the first place you would have seen that I took issue with the MC facing no challenges and having everything he wants handed to him on a silver platter by the author so if anything, my problem is that the pacing is too fast. As for giving the author 'time to write' I don't see how that would resolve any of my issues since they aren't necessarily with the direction of the story but rather with the author's writing ability which I don't see him improving anytime soon (especially if people refuse to point out the glaring flaws in his work). TLDR your indignation is unjustified and you clearly can't read well, probably why you're so quick to defend this dumpster fire.image
