Hello crew members! This is the author of One Piece: Crossed Flames fan-fiction. Hope you enjoyed my first work. I hope you provide your honest reviews to my work that will help me gain experience. As I have started working on a new fan-fiction, all your reviews will be helpful. Tschüss!
GhostofTaurus
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COMMEFirst of all, you're translation is top notch. The one advise I would give, is that sometimes less is more. One example would be the incident, where he tortured a pirate worth only 89 million bellies for his treasure. There is this long and repetitive explanation for his actions (which is simply some illogical bull) and it's even said, that it took him over a week, because the pirate had such a firm will. Plus you can just feel the chinese energy oozing in, when such "grandiose" descriptions for pretty unimportant/unimpressive situations are used. In nearly every chinese fanfic I've read they try to sell the protagonist's thoughts and actions as special, when they're mostly not even mediocre. But again top quality English, you've just taken a task upon yourself, that's extremely difficult. Gambare