Review Detail of Jolkkingdom in The Frozen Winter War
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hello author, it wouldn't hurt if you add more paragraphs describing mc going from one point to another, not just chatty and info dumps.Why not add a narrator pov? Then swift to mc pov from time to time, you read first and second chapter but that was the impression the novel gave me.
The Frozen Winter War
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thanks for the constructive criticism I appreciate it a lot actually since I do feel that my lack of detail has made this novel lack a lot of things that are essential key to a novel like the one I'm trying to make, I do appreciate this a lot, I will always accept more constructive criticism if you got anymore for this novel, since I'm working on this solo, with no external help and it's been a few years since I last really decided to try and write anything major like this.