Review Detail of Pythia in Climbing to Supremacy with a Chat Group
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Since it's been two months and the newest chapter tilted me, it's review time baby. Quality of writing: (SPAG) is 5/5. Good quality and structure that lets the story flow in speech, monologue and narration, so good job. Updates: again 5/5 (shouldn't have to explain this right?) Development: i'm giving a three simply because it just pauses to add some meaningless info that holts progression of the narrative for no reason...yeah, that's that. Character design: 2 just because of the new chapter. MC goes from nervous and has standards, beliefs, and morals... to a complete 180, i guess, half-'chad' just to make a business deal with Scathach the author is calling a 'relationship'. Biggest BRUH of fan-fiction i've seen in about 2 years. I admit, i was excited and built some small expectations to see a real developed Scathach romance instead of the usual. "Teach me/I'll teach you" proceeds to seggs because she's Scottish (Woohoo to my Celtic ancestors) and it ends up being. " I like you like a man liked women." "Okay, I don't know what love is but yes." (Okay, she's 2000 years old... and depending on depiction has a husband and daughter) then proceeds to bath naked and sleep together (no seggs tho) Yeah, so character design went from 4/5 with the Freya interactions and Hestia maturity to a hugely disappointing 2. World background: 4/5 ... I mean you can't really mess this up in a fan-fiction unless the author is illiterate. Solid 4/5.
Climbing to Supremacy with a Chat Group
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Yeah I kinda understand the problems now. The problem is that I didn't highlight their interactions much before this. Also that MC personality change isn't going to be as drastic as this chapter suggested, only some of his traits have been enhanced but yeah I can see the problem from a reader's perspective definitely. Also about the world background, you can't mess up that in a fanfic when it's already mostly established. I just added some things here and there but I won't really consider them my achievement.
ImmortalVirgin_0980:Yeah I kinda understand the problems now. The problem is that I didn't highlight their interactions much before this. Also that MC personality change isn't going to be as drastic as this chapter suggested, only some of his traits have been enhanced but yeah I can see the problem from a reader's perspective definitely. Also about the world background, you can't mess up that in a fanfic when it's already mostly established. I just added some things here and there but I won't really consider them my achievement.
Pythia:Those 'enhanced' traits made him a completely new character. Unless he has 'DID'
Do check out the new chapter. I think I have addressed most of your complaints there. If you still want to drop after reading it, it's fine.
Pythia:Those 'enhanced' traits made him a completely new character. Unless he has 'DID'