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Review Detail of Jolan_Hildebrandt in Villainous Retribution

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The way you word things is awkward. It's like your trying to impress the reader instead of focusing on clarity. That being said, I could follow the story for the most part. Read your work aloud and smooth over the bumpy parts before you put out chapters that the best advice I can give

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Villainous Retribution

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Alright. Thanks for the review! ^^