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It is a very good novel, with great potential. Only 2 things lower it. one The update frequency. and two I feel like the system is lacking. Apparently skills can't be earned through training, they can only be bought. I mean skills like cooking, boxing and others that he should have from his past life. and others of this life as art with daggers and noble etiquette. After faking so much he should have some acting skills, even if he's a novice. Another thing that you should take into account when giving abilities is the world he is in, for example when giving him martial arts it should be mainly those of the world he is in. Martial arts that use magic. Apart from the fact that certain explanations of the world are missing, for example the lineage and more details of the world. Something that you could do mini shorts with one of his magic and sword "teachers", who should have arrived when the mc was 10 years old but never arrived. PS: you should have dragged out Aria's infatuation phase a bit longer
My sister is a villain in an eroge?!
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Thank you for the detailed review, I appreciate it very much. Regarding the update frequency, I plan to improve it, at least one chapter a week since what would be "The prologue" if you can call it this way, is about to finish, and then the novel will focus on taking down the protagonist and stealing heroines. Regarding the world construction. It's an aspect that I realized a little late, since basically this was my first novel and I skipped several things that I could have added, so an apology for that and I've improved in future chapters. The system thing is a good suggestion, but mainly I did it that way because if I put all the skills of the main characters, I would have a list of several pages of pure things like "Apprenticeship, boxing, archery, manners, etc.".
I would recommend that you show it at least once, and make the system "update" and separate them by category, for example: magic: self explanatory martial arts: self explanatory Everyday skills: noble etiquette, cooking, etc. Specialized skills: Forging, Hunting, etc. (Skills that can have sub-skills or adjacent knowledge) Unique Skills: (Skills that shouldn't be natural) PP growth or hormone release. Lineage Abilities: Self explanatory. And so in the following ones it is even easier to put the system since he would only have to "focus" on one category and it would expand and show the ability that he wants.
harvier_:Thank you for the detailed review, I appreciate it very much. Regarding the update frequency, I plan to improve it, at least one chapter a week since what would be "The prologue" if you can call it this way, is about to finish, and then the novel will focus on taking down the protagonist and stealing heroines. Regarding the world construction. It's an aspect that I realized a little late, since basically this was my first novel and I skipped several things that I could have added, so an apology for that and I've improved in future chapters. The system thing is a good suggestion, but mainly I did it that way because if I put all the skills of the main characters, I would have a list of several pages of pure things like "Apprenticeship, boxing, archery, manners, etc.".