Review Detail of Gavyn_Mack in Borderlands: Conquest
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This story is a lot of things, and slow paced is not one of them, while the story is...... interesting, it also lacks in a few areas. The story is decently fast paced and sometimes the way things are worded makes it hard to keep track of what's going on. things happen way too fast in my opinion. Also the chapters are pretty long, which is great. in conclusion this story has a lot of potential, give it a shot. Just don't expect it to be......... perfect
Borderlands: Conquest
TheDarkDark
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Thanks for the constructive criticism I appreciate you interacting with the story. Keeps me engaged and encourages me to write better. I'll try and improve for the next arc since borderlands 1 is coming to an end.
Gavyn_Mack:well you have my support, I like what you've made and I can't wait to see what will happen next.👍👍👍
in reality, it took only 3 chapters for the MC to join the vault hunters and kill the destroyer, a lot of the chapters before that weren't focused on the vault or the destroyer. Anyways I think, you just got to flesh out the characters more. A lot of the interactions feel fake and forced, and combine that with certain situations that happen pretty fast, makes it pretty hard to believe and understand how things happened. Also, you could detail fights and actions a bit more. I guess what I'm trying to say, is that you're going through scenes really fast, and without much detail, so it makes it hard to understand and keep track of.
TheDarkDark:I think it appears that way simply due to how large the chapters are. Thanks for the feedback I appreciate the Reveiw. Also how would you reccomend slowing the pace of the story? I thought it was already slow as is. It took around 12 chapters to kill the destoryer.
Ah the Destroyer part, fair nough. I'll try and flesh out the characters more than. I'm not exactly a fan of stretching fight scenes out to much, i'll try my best to expand. I guess the vault couldve done more on expanding I think I focused a tad bit more scenes on his kingdom building.
Gavyn_Mack:in reality, it took only 3 chapters for the MC to join the vault hunters and kill the destroyer, a lot of the chapters before that weren't focused on the vault or the destroyer. Anyways I think, you just got to flesh out the characters more. A lot of the interactions feel fake and forced, and combine that with certain situations that happen pretty fast, makes it pretty hard to believe and understand how things happened. Also, you could detail fights and actions a bit more. I guess what I'm trying to say, is that you're going through scenes really fast, and without much detail, so it makes it hard to understand and keep track of.
TheDarkDark:Ah the Destroyer part, fair nough. I'll try and flesh out the characters more than. I'm not exactly a fan of stretching fight scenes out to much, i'll try my best to expand. I guess the vault couldve done more on expanding I think I focused a tad bit more scenes on his kingdom building.