I like the plot very much so it pains me to say that the grammar needs a lot of work. Its sad cause I am reading this because I loved the the authors other stories. I also know that this may have been a direct translation issue. I wish it was better edited. Important to note are the gender flexible characters, overly repeated words and direct translation of Proverbs that lose meaning. Finally statements that place adjectives incorrectly. Just a few changes to this will make a difference to the great story. I hope to see even more of the authors work. Thank you for sharing your writing.
Seth_97
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