Review Detail of z_andalus in I reincarnated with a delivery system(Finishing my other fanfic)

First stop using ok use alternatives such as (all right, fine, alright uh-huh and right) Next is capitalization it's very bad try to capitalize names,places or the first words of each sentence or whatever you call it Lastly dont add to much anime to the original world **. search for google for some good words alternatives so it does not get repetetive