Review Detail of neobenmike in Itas Adventure

Item: Itas Adventure
Rating: 1.8

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neobenmikeLv54yrneobenmike

Shitty grammar with wrong words used like treas(trees) and many more that I won't bother writing. 10 chapters in and minuscule improvement. Story so far isn't good (grammar is getting in the way, it makes things hard to imagine when the brain is trying to decipher what picture a sentence is trying to imply) I can't say anything much in regards to world building since there aren't any much chapter regarding the world, same with characters. The pace is slow I suggest the author should know more about all tenses(past, present, future), use of commas and double check that the words are the ones that is supposed to be used. Sentence construction and dialogue use, will have to be for the future. I won't be writing the other stuff I noticed as this is already long enough.

Itas Adventure

ITapan

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ITapanAuteurITapan

^^ english isn't my first language, have said from chapter 1 if see wrong comment it and i will fix it, this book is for becoming better, and slow pace is from alot of unfortunate accident in real life, but thanks for your honest opinion

4yr

ITapanAuteurITapan

And please if you got time please type what i should improve on, since it's rare i get feedbacks 🤐

4yr

neobenmikeLv5neobenmike

Search english grammar triangle in either google or youtube, Then read english novels or any literature do develop a "feel" for the language, this helped me in my fluency with my english, japanese and mandarin. English is not my first language as well so don't worry. When you have some grasp with the language, search for rules of writing for the english language. Never use machine translations or translators. That is pretty much it for the basics. This is what I meant by pacing: https://literarydevices.net › pacing Don't worry as that is for the readers to know, since some like it slow and others like it fast

ITapan:And please if you got time please type what i should improve on, since it's rare i get feedbacks 🤐

4yr

ITapanAuteurITapan

Thank you so much :)

neobenmike:Search english grammar triangle in either google or youtube, Then read english novels or any literature do develop a "feel" for the language, this helped me in my fluency with my english, japanese and mandarin. English is not my first language as well so don't worry. When you have some grasp with the language, search for rules of writing for the english language. Never use machine translations or translators. That is pretty much it for the basics. This is what I meant by pacing: https://literarydevices.net › pacing Don't worry as that is for the readers to know, since some like it slow and others like it fast

4yr