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  • Sonto_Chukwua day ago
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    ALEX AND MIRA COHORT

  • Sonto_Chukwua day ago
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    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

  • Sonto_Chukwua day ago
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    hey, author, this story is amazing in terms of world building, power system and scaling, and so much more, but the MC is either growing too fast, which is understandable because of his unqiue talent but it sets a bad president when no one else is growing at all, And even the FL is far into the MC shadow that her potential is being buried because can't think out of the box, barely uses her talent aside from her spacial affinity and lacks any sense of imagination. i understand that you want the MC to grow and prove how OP he is, but you give way too much focus on the MC alone even the prominent side characters like Principal Farnes and the rest feels like Passing characters than side characters because they are only mentioned when the MC is involved. see, the Mc is great and all, but if you only focus on the Mc, people will only see the MC allowing people to look for his flaws instead of his prospects, for instance, Shadow slave if Guilty had focused on Sunny people would have hated him because honestly he has a terrible personality same thing with Lift from supreme magus but they spread out the attention to multiple characters leving their Mc with enough wiggle room to breath, OK let me give the Red demon war as an example the whole reason the Federation was happy about that war is because it was a chance for them to grow and yet we could not tell if any one did except from the MC even the prodigies have no names the war was just all about senseless slaughter and we did not see any benefit the Federation gained. I don't doubt they gained a lot, but sometimes it encourages people to see it sometimes the perfect Mc you try to build is not as good as a well written side characters like for instance if prefer Cassie to Sunny and Nephis in shadow slave and there are many instances in Anime and so many books out there what I am trying to say is let's see more of the MC surroundings than the MC alone and let the FL shine as her own person not the MC shadow you can check out CHAPTER 550 and 552 for some of the ideas I had for the next Arc I know it's a bit rough around the edges but I believe with your Brilliant and Creative Mind you used to come up with this wonderful concept, world building etc. i know you will definitely be able to take this book to the next level. this book has so much potential to be at least one of the top 5 books here on here or go even further. Who knows. MY ADVISE DON'T START A NEW BOOK FROM SCRATH BUT IMPROVE ON THE DIAMOND YOU HAVE ON HAD AND SHINE IT UNTIL ALL IT CAN DO IS GLOW BECAUSE START FROM SCRATCH IS WAY HARDER THAN IMPROVING ON THIS BOOK BECAUSE THIS BOOK ALREADY HAVE IT LOYAL FANS PEOPLE LIKE ME ASKING WHEN THE CHAPTERS WOULD BE RELEASED AND WANTING THE ABSOLUTE BEST FOR THE BOOK STARTING FROM SCRATCH GIVING UP ALL YOUR HARD WORK AND BUILDING AND BUILDING EVERYTHING FROM THE BEGINNING AGAIN AND EVEN IF THE NEW STORY TURNS OUT TO BE VERY GOOD YOUR LOYAL READERS WON'T TRUST YOU AGAIN AND WON'T REALLY BE AS DEVOTED AS BEFORE THATS WHY I DONT TRUST ANY BOOK BY THE AUTHOR OF SUPREME HAREM SYSTEM ANYMORE NO MATTER HOW GOOD IT TURNS OUT BE. MY ADVISE ANNOUNCE A OFFICIAL HIATUS FOR THIS BOOK IT COULD BE 1 MONTH OR 3 MONTH JUST ENOUGH TO LEAVE YOUR READERS ANTICIPATING BUT NOT SO LONG THAT THEY GIVE UP ON THE BOOK THEN REVISE YOUR DRAFT AND TRY OUT MY IDEAS FOR WHICH ARE IN CHAPTER 550 AND 552 WELL AFER YOU WORK YOUR MAGIC AND MAKE IT BETTER I MEAN, I ALREADY SUGGESTED WHICH CHAPTERS WOULD BE IDEAL AS SIDE CHARACTERS SINCE WE THE READERS ALREADY HAVE SOME FAMILIARITY WITH THEM AS FOR PEOPLE LIKE PRINCIPAL FARNES AND THE REST WELL I KNOW SOMEONE WITH A MIND AS CREATIVE AS YOURS ALREADY HAS A FEW PLANS ON WHAT TO DO WITH THEM ESPECIALLY AFTER THE ARC I WROTE DOWN WHERE THEY GOT SIGNIFICANT BENEFITS BUT I AM TRULY LOOKING FORWARD TO WHAT TALENT YOU WOULD GIVE PRINCIPAL FARNES, MIRA MOTHER, MIRA AUNT, ADMIRAL OLGARD AND THE NEW SOON TO BE INTRODUCED SIDE CHARACTERS AND MAYBE SOON TO BE NEW MEMBERS OF ALEX AND

  • Sonto_Chukwua day ago
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    but why are the cats not training like Fufu and Snow

  • Sonto_Chukwu2 days ago
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    See this! I just gifted the story: Massage chair

  • Sonto_Chukwu2 days ago
    Répondu à Despair512

    I believe Damian is way too naive and self-righteous for my liking if he believes change would just be handed to him if he asked nicely although the Emperor method might be a bit tough heavy handed how do you expect him to bring change to a world where power is everything a world where men could literally destroy a mountain with a wave of their hand by asking nicely, by preaching it on the street? no, it by taking it by force even the world we live in now although flawed has come along way imagine if every revolutionary in history from the situation with slavery, to how the peasant were treated in the Victorian era down to Asia with the events of the Japanese against the Chinese and Korean to the Mongolian empire etc. do anyone think that if those revolutionaries were like Damian, always preaching how things can be made right without actually doing anything, always stuck on his high tower and blaming everyone, Change has never been the consequence of peace, but Peace has always been the consequence of war and change is born from violence and Force be it good change or bad change one man must not only raise his voice first but also his sword

  • Sonto_Chukwu3 days ago
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    to protect her child and luckily for her mother she was able advance to level of a higher being which effectivly cleansed her body of all toxins and as usual for the B- advancement her mother pass out which made the doctors and hospital staff ghink she was dead and Alyssa was able to find her just in time to take her back to the mistborn family and her father knowing about her weak body, and her using her remaining energy to protect Mira blamed himself for killing his wife then took up drinking and gambling before blaming Mira since if her mother had not protected Mira her mother might have been alive and Mira might have been ghe one dead) the Alyssa Mira aunt seeing mira should would tell her some sagely words like i ever since then your mother has refused to be weak to show any emotions and trained like a hermit day in and day out untill she became an S teir Variant class awakened from B- teir in only 15 years. This way i have covered every loop hole including why an S teir was presumed dead after giving birth and why the mom had no idea about Alex because she trains like a hermit. Then switch over to Alex trying to fulfill his requirements then somehow find some underground ruin while hunting after fulfilling his requirements he would notice that the underground ruin might be perfect for his pet training and it would increase his or his pet strength but help his pet refine his technique and learn to use his talents better then let Alex stay decide to stay in that ruin in the Primordial expanse for the next 6 months after calculating that that time shou be enough for him to help pet master his talent. You would use that to remove Alex from the next arc truth be told his growth pacing is to fast and would start to seem annoying to readers since all the story is about how Alex keeps at a cheat mean while the rest of the world around him stays stagnant after that there would no more talk about Alex again only about the Federation and Mira. Then we would switch back to Mira and the Federation Mira should be in a worse mood after hearing her aunt story about her mom (fyi * mira should not lash out at aunt even after the story she should remain shocked and speechless.) At her depressed mood let Principal Farnes come to her tell ask what wrong she would hesitate at first then tell him how she worries that she is too weak and dragging Alex down and how she feels lost on what to do then let him tell her that he understands her that because of that S+ ancient class guy had always felt inferior especially after he lost to the guy and the guy refusal to bother himself with humanity made him angry knowing that humanity would have to depend on him at the end so since he knew he could not anything about his class for the time being he decided to train everything think outside the box so started recalling everything the system has ever told him to get on way to push himself further he trained his talent bot conventionally and unconventionally and that how he ended where he is right now then Mira would start to ponder on everything he Said about thinking out side the box using her imagination and recalling everything the system has ever told her she would recall how the system praised her spacial affinity how the system said she has limitless potential and how there something golden inside her and how phoenix said he could feel something mysterious within her then she would realise how she barely uses her talent to to the fear and hesitations how that must be whats holding her back then she would remember how the system talked about something golden inside her she would as herself if it has to do with with he golden presence talent then she would think more on her golden presence talent then come to a realization on how when she was on the floating island and used golden presence against that c teir variant monster and barely killed but after the she did not use golden presence again bus was able to kill other variant beast except from when

  • Sonto_Chukwu3 days ago
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    she fought those 5 beast before being attacked by Nicholas then she would be like come to think of it Golden presence increases her energy by 3 times but where does it get the energy from, its the surroundings so she would ask her self so when golden presence ends if it possible that some of those energy gathered from the surroundings remains inside as her own making her stronger than before she used then she would realize if thats the case her skill is almost as of cheat as Alex skill although a bit on the lesser side then system would update her that she has gained understanding on her skill and it leveled up to either A+ or S you can handle (the remaining details about the talent yourself) she would decide to go to the Primordial expanse as well to train but when she goes to the Primordial expanse she would remember what that dwarf said about the Primordial expanse merging she would think to her self if it possible for there to be an alien race in the void and how to the creatures of the void navigate the void she would decide to enter void to train instead to prove her hypothesis then using her spacial detection abilities alongside the energy detection ability in the void she would use it to navigate the void, using that tracking method to hunt void creatures and learn to not only navigate the void but travse it so that when ever comes in contact with anything to much for to deal with again in the void she can easily escape without having to leave the void it self so she does not have to be hesitant about entering thd void since she can navigate it her self and train in the void she would even hunt weaker void beast and even find a cityin the void where she would alot more about the void and how to better navigate it also she would meet the B- king class beast in void that would meet the requirements for her rank up ( *btw make the upgraded golden essence talent have partial activation that allows her to activate it to about 10% without incuring any back lash, but only increases her strength by 5% while the other 5% works on transforming the energy taking from the environment to her own strength increasing her base strength by decimals or more she more she keeps it active*) so when she enters the void she would notice that the energyshe is absorbing is not the ordinary energy but raw and unfiltered spacial energy aka void energy whichmight try to trear her body apart but in the system would alert her that she her body cant handle anymore void energy and if she want to use the excess to create a void pocket then she would agree the she would able to createa separate space in her mind the size of a shoe box but by the time she leaves the void in 6 months after discovering a city in the void and hunting void creatures and by in 6 months when she leaves the void it would be the size of a small to medium size country at the end of the 6 month and beforeshe leaves the void would then kill the B- kingclass beast she needs to rank up in the void and during that fight she would forced to use the full might of her golden presence absorbing as much energyas she can an increasing her void pocket to the size of a small, medium or large country your pick that can store anything except for life. NOTE I KNOW I DON'T NEED TO SAY THIS BUT ALL THIS WOULD NOT HAPPEN AT ONCE WITH MIRA YOU MIX THE POV WITH WHATS HAPPENING TO FEDERATION THAT I AM ABOUTTO EXPLAIN NOW TRY AND PICK GOOD CLIFF HANGER SCENE TO SWITCH POV TO LEAVE EVERY ONE ANXIOUSFOR THE NEXT CHAPTERS TO COME ,then you switch to the this bew Aliens reading the reports on the wiping out of their vanguard fleet and cross referencing it with their data on red demon and federation war, then this knew race being more cautious would decide to avoid the humans for now and focus on taking as much territory for the next 1 year alongside building their forces and strong holds ( why did i suggest this you may ask because this story is to fast paced with wars and battles coming up every time w

  • Sonto_Chukwu3 days ago
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    ( why did i suggest this you may ask because this story is to fast paced with wars and battles coming up every time without any growth to any one else but the MC this stories need side characters to remove alot of focus from the the MC.) mean while in the federation 3 months after Mira and Alex departure to the Primordial expanse on a habitable planet. they concered happen to spawn a A+ and below (#all the beast would be of lesser Fenir linage like the king of evermore being of lesser dragon linage and as wolf beast this could explain why they are so strong and so many#) flood gate with at least 3 A+ ancient class with like 50 A to A- king to variant class with the 10 strongest being A King class and their pack or followers being 4 A+ to A- variant class each and under each of those 4 A+ to A-variant class and the A+ to A- mutant class beast can be the direct subordinate of the variant class. there are also several B+ to B- mutant and ordinary along side 2 to 3 B+ to B- variant class among commanding the mutant B+ to B- class and the mutant B+ to B- would be the commander of the cannon fodder B+ to B- ordinary class numbering in the hundreds which the ordinary class humans would kill but some would also die in the battle using their weapons and skill then you introduce some good prodigies not as back ground characters but as soon to be frequently seen side characters like that girl with big chest in the unversity arc and that guy from the beginning that recommended Alex give them a story and make them into proper side characters, have them (the prodigies) fight the the few Variant B+ to B- commanders and show us their system interface along with their talents and all that they don't all need talent in the S teir but B- to A+ would be fine, show us their system interfaces after they use the mutant beast core showing us their interface would properly solify their place as soon to be important side characters as for the B+ to B- mutant class you can have those other not name prodigies deal with them ohh and you can home of the A teir humans fight too they can fight the Mutant A+ to A- beast and as for the A+ to A- Variants class major commander have the mutant S- teir fight them also introduce them and their ability but they would majorly be background characters but we would get to know them better as well 10 of them to be precise the 10 would fight 4 A+ to A- variant class each and the would only win by the skin of their teeth with atleast 1 or 2 dying with 3 more on the verge of death which was only averted because they were able to make to variant class by absorbing the beast cores they got and the remaining passing out after becoming variants class S- teir which was the result of the addition of the combined A+ to A- variant class soul core they got as rewards the got from the red demon which was recovered from both the war and wreckage from phoenix attack (#i am guessing the Principal Farnes is the only person among the S teir who is at S+ and the rest are between S and S- teir and if I am not mistaken MIRA mother and at least 2 or 3 of the other 8 members of the round table are most especially Admiral Olgard are at S teir while the other are at S- but they are all between variant and mutant class at the very least and some of the variant class S teir should have at least 40% in their king classification bar rank up but could not go any further because of how hard it is to rank up as a king class that is the assumption i am going to use going forward#.) as for the 10 A+ to A- king class beast, 3 of the variant class S teir would show those 3 being Admiral Olgard, Mira mom and Mira aunt this 3 would be fighting with 3 of the A and A- king class beast each that makes 9 beast in total and the last would be the only A+ king class beast and it would be watching coldly while it companion fight the 3 variant class S teir which comprises of Mira Mom (Althea), Admiral Olgard and Mira aunt (Alysa) and after they defeat their 9 opp

  • Sonto_Chukwu3 days ago
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    A+ king class beast and it would be watching coldly while it companion fight the 3 variant class S teir which comprises of Mira Mom (Althea), Admiral Olgard and Mira aunt (Alysa) and after they defeat their 9 opponents with heavy injuries they team up to fight against the A+ rank king class beast and only win by the skin of their teeth but in other not to pass out immediately and be left vulnerable they each store their 3 beast core each into their storage and decide to discuss what to do with the A+ soul core but Admiral Olgard would decide to leave it with the Mistborn sister and trade his A- king class beast core with their A king class instead bringing him to 3 A king class beast core because he believed that with how close he was to king rank the three A king class beast core would be enough for him and after they would all use teleportation to their ship rest knowing that they are already to weak to be of any use and could be ambushed (#NOTE all this battles i talked about here should end in 1 month the remaining 2 months before Alex and Mira return should be used introduce the new side characters more and the old major side characters like Principle Farnes, Admiral Olgard we need see them more as their own people not as passing character who pops out only when Alex is around. you can even create some light hearted scene between Alyssa mira aunt and Admiral Olgard after surviving together you can say Admiral Olgard started falling for Alyssa leading to the cold Admiral being embarrassed around her and she noticing that Admiral Olgard might have started having feelings for her since she is not naive and more emotionally aware than her sister starts teasing him when she gets the chance#) ohh yh don't forget to mix the POV of this battle with Mira adventures in void you can pick the cliff hanger moments to switch pov then when Mira adventure is getting exciting pick a critical time to switch pov again you get what I mean 😉😄😉😉. Then as for the 3 ancient class who looks more ferocious and ther Fenir bloodline seems to be purer than the ones fighting in the other battle field but the person who would Fight them alone with be Principal Farnes you would have him say something wise or cool then he would fight the three A+ Ancient class beast and he would with some injuries and with his energy reduced to about 30% then would start taking their beast core out knowing that at the state he is in it would be unwise to absorb ancient class beast core so he store's them away but just after storing the last beast core the whole Battle field hears a roar and a massive Aura descends the humans in battle would be shocked (#oh yh there would be weaker battle fields as well so you can mention them in passing so readers would know it's not only the main guys that are fighting but also the C + to E- elites and this would help at the end when maybe someone is giving their report on the casualty and benefits they gained from this battle#) so every one would be shocked the injured principal farnes would look up only to see a massive wolf looking at him releasing the Aura of an S- Ancient beast class everyone starts to shake in despair and the few people either still fighting or had just finished their fight aside from the 3 that teleported back to their ship will look up at the beast then the beast would talk surprising the humans just finding out that beasts can talk maybe it would say something like humans something something about killing it descendants then Principle Farnes would now understand that those 3 he just killed who looked like their bloodline was purer than the rest were not the the true alpha the S- ancient class beast is and not only that it seems like it ancient class Aura is fluctuating a bit it seems like it divine classification percentage might already be atleast at 50 % then it and Principal farnes would start fighting you know an S+ king class being vs and an S- Ancient class being and with Principle Farnes slightly recov