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1. I think you're right. Readers tend to see themselves reflected in the protagonists, so if they are ridiculed, betrayed, or suffer other negative actions, the readers will show their displeasure like the monkeys they are. 2. You also have a point that the author was not sincere about the NTR part, or maybe he didn’t consider it as such. Still, I didn’t understand the “cm” part. 3. What?
Review of the First 50 Chapters (that nobody asked for, but I'm going to write it anyway and will change if necessary) I liked it. I like the protagonist, I like the author mentioned in the fanfic, although sometimes he comes off a bit silly, but not annoyingly so. I like the system he has, the combination of animes/mangas/manhwas he used to create the world and their interactions. Now, the controversial part: yes, there is NTR. I'm not going to lie, did it serve for character development? I think so. The character he used was quite disposable, Tsukimi Chifuyu from Seiso Kanojo Ochiru. It's a doujin and I'm sure everyone recognizes it, you filthy degenerates, don't fool yourselves. At some point, I wondered why he didn't stop her from going with the blonde guy. I've read some fanfics where they save her, where they prevent her from going with the blonde guy, and with this story, I realized something: it wouldn't serve any purpose. He watches over her and prevents them from going further, but he doesn't stop her, because what's the point of being with someone with so little conviction that decides to cheat on you over a photo of a kiss? Sooner or later, she would have cheated on you because that's who she is, and it's not the protagonist's fault; he's a normal person dating a girl who seemed to have good feelings but turned out she didn't. I think all those one-star negative reviews that just say "NTR, NTR, NTR" really affect the fanfic. I had known about this fanfic for a while, but those comments put me off immediately and only now did I give it a chance. The chapters where he confronts her are quite loaded with tension and emotion. I think he did well, and I would recommend giving it a chance.
I'm not sure how to respond to that. The title is there and the link I copied and pasted works for me.
I read more than half of the chapters and here is my review. It's good; I like the premise and that the character is not a fool. I like the first world they explore; it has good grammar and feels fluid. Now, the bad, according to me: I don't like that the system has so much dialogue. During a fight, half of it was dialogue from the system saying that its abilities were improving, and I found it somewhat annoying. Even so, I recommend it.
Here is my review of the first 80 chapters. I have to say it's good; the chapters are short, but there are many, so it balances out. The story is not bad, it's slow but entertaining. I suppose it's a translation, but so far I don't have that unpleasant feeling of reading an MTL. I hope you continue with the work. Good luck and best regards.
Sometimes we don't appreciate translations. I liked the fanfic and went to look for it in MTL. Obviously, I found it, but it's horrible to read words like "Huiye Xiutai", "Shui Wuyue", "maeltrons". It's terrible and it made me lose the desire to keep reading. I look forward to continuing reading your translation. 11/10.