Yoan_Roturier
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A very good story with vivid scenes and characters that actually feel alive, not just 3D archetypes. Nicely written with a few minor grammar issues. I think I'll be binging this story for the next few days. Good work author
The story is well written as far as I can tell. There are a few repetitive words and turns of phrases but you generally gloss over them if you don't pay attention to those. The pacing is neither too fast nor too slow, well balanced in general. Characters are interesting, my personal favorite is the Monitor (yeah not the MC). What I like the most though are the dialogues. They have a living feeling to them. Overall it's pretty good. For improvement, I would suggest more
Alright, so far so good. I think you can improve on the writing but it's not something that can be learned in one go and the only efficient way to learn it is to be curious and keep writing. I'm not into romance so I can't exactly review this the way a romance reader would. But according to what I read, I think you're doing just fine. Keep up the good work, author.
Is he like the guy who's gonna take the other guy's place ahaha! xD
Lol, no worries xD