PeterGriffith
"Wisdom has been chasing you, but somehow you are faster." -
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This is just sad, the first chapter had me, but 2nd to 8th lost me. The author is unresponsive to anything or anyone I honestly dont blame ya for it, you should have also added in the synopsis that it's a tag along with Rimuru. and honestly for someone so powerful it could have been a stand alone for his own adventure but you do you, Just disappointed that it turned out like that.Writing: 4 starStory dev: 2 star just a rehash of the Original with a strap on of OC.Characters: 5 star it's artoria what else can I say.Update: 4 starWB: 3 star
why are you always mentioning spiderman this and that? is he that integral in the story?
yeah, just showing a paragraph or two of him training himself or just about to finish. Instead of a sentence of "oh yeah I put bricks in my shadow" ain't that just lackluster? just a paragraph or two would suffice so readers wont get bored of reading him training. I kinda forget sometimes that WebN doesn't really have writing like AO3 or RR so I forget to lower my standards.
0 feats, 7 kamikaze attempts
so... when's the next chapter?
nope, I've seen it done 6th time I think? maybe more.
Then why did he choose her of all the other characters he could have chosen? that's kinda dumb to begin with ain't it?
yeah, it's used a lot in AO3
too convoluted, you need to simplify.
the student council pres and vice, It'd be interesting to see more interaction with em.