UndeadProgenitor
M’pi cho pase piman pou ghede.
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UndeadProgenitor13 days agoCommentéCan see English is not your first language and that’s fine. Remove the “once upon a time beginning” it’s a bit juvenile and no Japanese names “unless you yourselves are Japanese or is a setting for the story” it’s a bit cliche and not very creative. Work on the conjugation too, you started the story in the past and yet you went to say “are” somewhere. All of that is just from me skimming over it. Good luck on your writing journey you’ll get better.
- UndeadProgenitor17 days agoCommenté
When’s the next update?
- UndeadProgenitora month agoRépondu à Blueslime
I also apologize
- UndeadProgenitor2 months agoRépondu à Blueslime
Get off my meat friend
- UndeadProgenitor3 months agoCommenté
- UndeadProgenitor3 months agoRépondu à Der_Schnitter
No need to be so cringe bro. Ik this is wn but come on
- UndeadProgenitor4 months agoRépondu à Sean_Kelaotswe
That’s related to his story cause? The guy was fighting for his life throughout the whole story and that’s your issue?
- UndeadProgenitor4 months agoCommenté
Drake shoulda retired after that
- UndeadProgenitor4 months agoCommenté
Tell me, do you move? YOU WILL! Ahh moment…
