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This is a review of the first chapter. So far so good! Keep up the pace and the momentum rolling. Maybe try to remove quotation marks when Larissa is having thoughts. I don't know. Maybe that's my preference when it comes to dialogues and monologues, just to differentiate the two. I'd like to know more about the dynamics of the family. The plot is typical of CEO stories but I am sure somewhere in the middle we'll get a twist. Looking forward to more chapters! [img=recommend]