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Martial Spirit Cultivation

Auteur: proking
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While chasing the serial killer who murdered his wife, Kang Yu-min died and transmigrated into a body of a 16 year old boy, Moon Gi-wan, who lived in an another world where cultivation existed. In this new world, martial energy was everything and it was everywhere in the environment like an oxygen. It was an essence of life to everyone. Without it, the world wouldn't work naturally. People would cultivate the martial energy to become stronger and reach greater heights through it. The higher one's cultivation is, the more that individual gets recognized by everyone in the world. When Kang Yu-min stumbles upon such world, he was confused at first and was also clueless on what to do next, but after searching for a purpose in life, he finally understood what he had to do and for that, he will go to extreme lengths and achieve it at any cost. Join Yu-min with his journey on becoming the strongest martial spirit cultivator in the world.

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Verhygo
VerhygoLv12

I'd like to remind that this is entirely my own opinion and only based upon everything up to chapter 9. (Because there weren't more out yet.) Writing Quality: The writing is quite good, no major parts that are unreadable, only slight grammar mistakes.  Story Development: I really like the genuine character interactions. They have good comedic timing and feel like actual people are talking with each other. The speed though seems a little too fast, and although it is hard to tell with so few chapters, the characters have no real time to rest and stomach any informations they are given. Character Design: Although the main character is not really a child, he still behaves like it. Which is usually entertaining, of course. Generally, all character interactions are entertaining, just a little bit far apart from each other. I fear, though, that the bad guys so far seem to suffer from extreme brain insufficiency. Which is only based on two scenes though... It is hard to judge if all characters are given care in so little time, especially villains have a hard time to show more than just the evil trait they have if it is in just so little time... Update stability: What's to say? The writer does still write, so good. I guess... World Background: There is a lot, and I mean a lot of exposition. At some times it flows in naturally into a conversation, but just as often is it overwhelming and robs me of immersion. It just comes to show how much love the writer put into developing this world, yet it gives not enough time for the reader to fall in love with it... Summary: I dislike giving judgement so fast. Especially when there is potential to be seen, but not equally distributed to all parts of the story. 

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Helldragon_xdLv1

So I finished everything to chapter 8. I like the world-building you made in this new world, and chapter 1 I assume the characters that were introduced, such as the reporter and the killer, perhaps even the wife, are foreshadowing the characters in the new world that would be reincarnated. This is all nice and refreshing, and I'm someone who's read lots of system based work. (Solo Leveling, The Strongest System, etc) so It's sort of hard for me to comment on a starting system work. I can follow along to the ideas you've established, and I like how there's twists with your ideas. In this case, the mc using his past life's martial arts skills to overpower someone with higher cultivation with technique. I've also been planning to use the same concept in my book later on with character's development, so this idea I really like. Things you need to work on more: Although grammar is fine for the majority, there's some capitalization errors in every chapter that I think you can go back on and look. I feel like your character interactions have been fine and realistic, but the execution could be polished some more (recommend doing some research for this part). There's a few wording errors as well but not enough to be alarming, just be more careful regarding word usage. Some words are spelled right but in the incorrect form so the meaning changes, making the sentence incorrect. I'd suggest working on polishing early chapters to attract more readers in. Maybe you can find an editor to help you fix those errors, since your ideas are fine but just requiring more practice on how to execute them well. I'm hoping your system will also have stuff that makes it unique compared to the common genre.

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