Sound of sentence

This one might not sound too odd to beginning writers, right? The good ol' teacher taught you that if the sentence doesn't sound right then to change it, right? Wrong, some sentences that don't sound right are right.

Nonetheless, today we're talking about those seriously important times, like the romantic dinner where they fell in love, or where she/he finally found their parents, or where they find out they are royalty from outer space and their home-planet needs them or it'll fall into Astro-pieces, or where after all chapters they caught the bad guy it and turns out to be their best friend or lover or someone close.

Because I work mostly in the romance department, my example will be their first kiss. First, I will display something that rushes through the special moment and disappoints the readers.

As they finished laughing they realized they were inches from each other's face, he leaned closer and they kissed.

Sad right? And the worst part is that isn't as bad as it gets. Time for what readers would want.

As they finished laughing they realized they were inches from each other's faces. For that moment, the world stopped, there was nothing and no one other than them. He leaned closer and whispered 'I love you' into her lips, damp and soft, and kissed her. His hand went from her hip to her boob to her arm, softly rubbing it up and down. She climbed on top of his lap, making him force his head back but he didn't mind, her lips were the softest he had kissed. They broke apart, in need of breath, and just looked into each other's eyes.

That was way better than example one, wasn't it? And the sad part is I was lazy on example two.

There is a time where it's okay to rush a bit and then there's a time where it's not okay to rush right through things, trust me if there was an easier way to make things better and fuller, I would know how to.

Please don't disappoint your readers by rushing through a special moment, and it'd be even worse if you yourself were looking forward to the moment as well and just summed the whole thing up in a few messily sentences.

Great, now that today's lesson is over, go write your own special moment, you don't need characters if you don't have any spare and you don't wanna get confused or make more, but if your thing isn't romance please go write your own special moment. Even if romance is your thing, go write your own special moment, after all, it is yours, not mine.