Focused Fire (ATLA)

Whenever someone writes a story about Avatar, he is either native of the Fire Nation, or he is a native of the fire nation. Avatar's lick dog becomes 3 naive children who only growl. They should all be killed first.

Just started reading this fanfiction, and currently I'm on chapter 20, but wow is this good. When reading any novel, I find it very easy to identify the things that are wrong with it and since WebNovel allows you to comment on paragraphs, I tend to identify them and call them out as I go... 20 chapters in, and I'm loving this; didn't even realized when I reached that chapter.

The good: The writing quality of this fanfiction is top notch. From grammar to punctuation, there are virtually no mistakes that I have caught. The characters seemed very interesting and got fleshed out as the story progressed. Xing’s progression throughout the story was fantastic to read as he went from soldier, to colonel and kept racking up various achievements and titles. The bad: I disliked how sometimes there would be chapters where Xing would be put on the sidelines and the story would shift towards a side characters POV. This is personal preference, but when the MC is sidelined for multiple chapters, it starts to get boring. Personally, I unfortunately dropped this series at chapter 88 and I will be expanding on that more. Towards the end of the series, Xing starts to do some outlandish feats that should probably be only reserved for the Avatar. Single-handedly taking on an army is pretty outlandish even with Xing’s unique bending approach. Finally, what lead me to drop is that I found out in a chapter comment there is yuri. I really wish this was included in the tags or synopsis. I knew there was a harem tag from the beginning and obviously assumed it would be Xing with multiple other partners (I’m a harem degen and even I started to want only Azula x Xing). Considering this, I really think the author dropped the ball with the ending of this series and tanked the relationships. The yuri pairing especially does not make sense at all to me considering what Xing and Azula have been through and taking their supposed personalities into account. Overall, if you are an ATLA fan, I would highly recommend checking this novel out as long as you don’t mind the bad aspects I mentioned in this post (bad is obviously subjective to everyone though). Definitely one of the more professionally written stories I have read on here even though it ended up not being my taste.

I honestly suprised how good this is. Just started reading today stop a 30 left and came back to 30 more chapters added unless this was stole from somewhere else, you are a amazing author

This ff is best described as a hidden gem.

Despite the score I give this is an amazing story with well thought out characters and detailed scenes from when they are traveling to the battle sequences. However the problem comes with the relationship of you’ve ever seen me on here you know I’m harem enthusiast and yet this one somehow made me wish for a single fl and when I found out how the “harem” is implemented I was disgusted, in a gist the main character gets cucked and before you say it’s not or whatever azula dam near has s*x with ty lee before suki interrupts them and even afterward they try to meet up BEHIND THE MC BACK it’s the definition of cuckoldry so despite how I liked this story i must leave truly a dam shame and wasted time

this book is simply a hidden gem with amazing story telling and character development

İ must say this is how would original work would be if MC were in that story too one of Best fan fic of atla. There is no making characters more naive, impotent or changing them and storyline consistent and logical too. For harem it would be spoiler but There is no harem only romance only in the end There would be a 3rd

No soporto al Prota, parece un simp, aunque no tan extremo, y el echo que no llame a Azula por su nombre siendo pareja cuando dos de sus amigas si me parte absurdo; además, quien es el Prota de la historia? Xing o Azula, porque parece que Azula tiene más protagonismo.

Yuri trash, NTR(MC), WHAT A DISGUSTING SHIT THE AUTHOR DID... Disgusting implementation of harem. Cuckold protagonist. Azula stays with Suki 🤢🤮🤮🤮🤮 *******************************************************************************************************

Great story but your a horrible person for including some mild Ntr it came out of nowhere and genuinely made me want to stop reading. For those of you who haven’t hit the three digit mark in chapters Azula has a mental breakdown and her friend Ty Lee takes advantage of her during said breakdown. And while Xiang does address it, it wasn’t taken care of properly and it kind of ruins, a lot of the character development or at least makes you question how much Azula valued their relationship. Or least makes you question what kind of a person Ty Lee is so besides the NTR it’s a great book and it’s definitely worth reading

: Chapter 23 have been reading this for hours, enjoying it alot, great character portrayal and likable OC's. only flaw is that it gets a bit confusing with the POV's and the remembering of who the character was but since I am binging it rn i have no problem adjusting quickly to that with context clues

An astonishingly vibrant, deep, brutal, heartwarming, and gory love letter to what Azula could have been. To what she deserved a chance to be able to become.

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Bro you just become my idol right now! I aspire to write as good as you are! The plot! And the vocabulary! And the recent tension in the arc! Omg! Thanks for the masterpiece!

I love this Fic! It hits all the right spots in what I like reading. My only regret from reading it? Now I cant help but compare it to everything else and realizing just how better this Fic is. Great work Author-San! P.S:I need more chaps or else I’m gonna die of no chapter illness. A common disease that causes Chronic insomnia while waiting for new chapters.

Hey you Author. Go F*** yourself. You made me an addict because this story is so good. read though All chapters at least two times because it is so good. to all who start reading this book: don't. you won't be able to stop yourself

Hands down the best ATLA ff on here the other one has a system in the story but this definitely tops it. I really like the brutal twist this story has

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