BNHA: The Rise of The Yakuza

What a great story made only by the best.

The mc is cool the gramar is good Nice fanfic---------------667 EKIP--------------------------------------------------------------------------

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interessante, tem futuro.

1. thsi story is really hood imo i like the villian route but i think this might be dropped 2. is that nishikiyama on the cover? i cant believe i just noticed

I personally enjoyed the story so far. I hope the author will not drop it after going on a hiatus. The story pace is average. I cannot say it is too rushed nor too slow. At first I did not notice the “BNHA” in the title but the concepts inside the story did remind of of the manga/anime. The author’s originality is pretty good, despite borrowing the concept. I would personally spend more time to invest in the characters since they are moving gears. So, hardships and dilemmas are a great way to introduce what a character is made of. Of course, the author offered many situations but some of them are not completely exhausted. However, I am a slow-pace authors, so many may disagree with me. Ahahaha, some people might call me boring as I tend to exhaust a concept until its last drop. 🤔 Nonetheless, the story is going well the first 11 chapters. It has potential to gather a fan base. Grammar wise, there is some work to be done and how wording and sentences can be polished but then again, many authors have proofreaders and editors to do that for them. So I don’t think this should be such an issue as the story is clearly delivered!

Excellent novel, writing quality is very amazing. There are no misspelled words or terms. I was able to picture the looks of the characters in a few paragraphs. As for grammar, I'm bad at it as well so I can't judge the grammar of your book, but the way I see it, I think there are no mistakes. Perhaps you could proofread in order to make sure. The stability of updates is an automatic five for me. World Background, nothing to complain here too. Paragraphs are not lengthy and the dialogues are sometimes hilarious, sometimes striking, and even attention-grabbing. They are not wordy nor are the dialogues boring to read. As for the plot itself, it seems to be interesting. Very captivating. I don't watch anime except for Pokemon so I am quite unfamiliar with some terms in here, but still, I could just search em up in the internet. Keep up the good work author!

Few grammatical errors or maybe typos. I suggest to shorten those long paragraphs. And beware of your punctuation marks. Honestly, I am not a fan of yakuza or street fighting. But the story is good I recommend this novel to all those dog eat dog lovers type of novel.

Yeet!!! I love BNHA, and seeing who likes it too makes me happy😊😊😊. Anyways, If you love BNHA, I recommend you to try this thing out, you will not regret it!!! It's a really good book that uses BNHA logic!!! The writing quality is good, pacing is not that slow nor fast!!! Just the right pacing that is enough to portray the story well👌👌👌. Keep up the good work, author!!!

Great story for the people who love games and anime. I noticed few grammar problum at the start but later there were fewer and fewer as i progressed. If you still have grammer problum use grammely will fix lot of grammer problum. The first chapter is key to get people hooked so i think you should use grammerly and fix the little grammer problum. Overall => Its a great story and must read for anime and video games fans.

I loved the story, because it hop led me from the beginning! I don’t really read a lot of novels like these but you really proved that I should! So all in all good job author!

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First and foremost, you have a good grasp on what you really wanted this story to be. The ML is quite aggressive, if I may say. I hope he humbles down after his reincarnation. Please continue writing this, since it has potential. I'm cheering you on! Suggestions and Critique Although time skips are fine, please do not use them in succession. There are a lot of things that are left out from the plot, and that might confuse the readers. Also, instead of dumping all the information in one paragraph, let the ML's history be revealed slowly throughout the entirety of the story. Like, for example, when a situation happens, relay some snippets of his history that relates with the situation. For the editing part, for easy reading, the beginning of the dialogues could be written on a separate line from the paragraph, instead of incorporating it inside. We all have our mistakes in grammar, so they are easily proofread. Having a good grasp of the English grammar will enable you to have better transitions and flow. Good luck!!!

Great story so far, definitely worth a read. The MC is interesting and while I don't usually like fanfics that don't follow canon events, this one does it pretty well with future developments being promising. Leaving a review in hopes for more chapters.