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I like this novel every thing about this novel is good the grammar tolerable the background a little convolutedly scheming it puts me off sometime but still tolerable but the thing I hate most is mc I really hate him he has literally no relevance to the plot of the story and he is a desperate coward and just disappointing

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i real like the story line and the mc, the author has well written about humain true nature. How humain act and think [img=update][img=coins][img=fp][img=recommend][img=exp]

Its been a while since I have read a potter verse story so rich in character. The story is not build and maintained on dialogue, nor does it reads like a summary. It is written in a sort of Reflective way that makes you feel like you're a apart of it. I experience fantastic levels of immersion on this story, I love how the author managed to make 2 years in bauxbattons feel like he really lived it without the usual desperate painting of class schedules, contents and descriptions that will never be used again. The author has a way with words that seems to give substance and weight to the story beyond the norm, the MC feels like he is genuinely going through life and maturing in views whilst being influenced by his environment in his developments. All in all. This is a fantastic read.

Writing quality 2.5 - a lot of the sentences either end in the reader being confused by either missing important words or using words that make little sense for that sentence and I tried to read this but by chapter 3 I was questioning quite a few sentences because my brain simple could not understand what that sentence meant. stability of updates 5 - it has pretty fast updates from what I can see Story Development 4- This part is really good as long as you can figure out what the author is trying to put into words though even if you cant you can usually get the gist which makes it pretty great. character design 4- By chapter 3 I have come to see the characters as realistic except for the caretaker's son who seems to have young master syndrome but he is still more realistic than I can say for most fanfictions world background 5- I always give 5 stars for this on pretty much any fan-fic I read but this one at least deserves some credit since it shows more than just "he lives in orphanage and then went to diagon alley asked man to open door and then went to Gringotts and got lineage test" like pretty much every other harry potter fan fic (yes i know there are good harry potter fan fics but those are few and far between)

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Idea is great, world expansion is great, however the grammar is horrible it's all over the place and makes story hard to read. like Veela is called Vail and other nonsense like that hurts my brain.

The novel is good and so is the story yet the words and sentences in some paragraphs don't make sense and don't add up, I think overall this is atleast 3.0 star+/5.0

this is a Google translation word for word from a Russian story. reading this will seem very convoluted and confusing at time but of course it's a Google translation . there are 372 pages and 46 parts to this story, what that means I dont know. this could be a cool story if properly translated I am guessing . So thanks for the copy over here author/paster.

So far this story has been a mess.... it needs an editor big time and that would increase the overall quality of the fic but adding cultivation type stuff for Harry Potter to me is just dumb idk how else to put it(guess im dumb lol) but yeah you have to read it to understand what I mean but so far it hasnt been worth the read.... could be much better if it had an editor

Очень интересный русский фанфик. Читал его в оригинале. Не оконченый. Ждать придётся долго. Главы выходят раз в месяц или два......................................

Searching for mat for girlfriend in school and for friend very smart very goooooooooooooooood searching and searching and searching gooooooooooooooooo gooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooood oooooooooooood oooooooooooood

The concept of the story is interesting, very good. I think the written language can do with some improvements as I had to guess at some things in the story , maybe it is a cultural difference, in the way you say things which caused me confusion.

good story

I have only read a couple of starting chapters and it really is an interesting story. The MC is really fleshed out and what I personally like so far is his journey that's described out pretty well. The young age does make it a bit weird but it is Harry Potter so it does not really matter. I would like to read about his family's past, it is quite interesting. A bastard of bastards. The grammar could be better. I suggest grammarly, it would really help, I too use to correct my English. -This story might not be for you if you want a fanfic that immediately goes into or starts from the maagical world

Please update soon i am enjoying reading it

It’s a little hard to understand. The start is good and easily readable but later on the quality of the writing just drops. Calling dumbledore a lesbian, Veela vails and other such and such. It wouldn’t matter so much if the parts that were hard to read weren’t so important to the progression of the story. It just ruins the story.