Ancient Doomsday In MHA (HIATUS)

Good man keep it up don't drop it. There not so many people who writes about Doomsday fanfic man do you know strong he is he kill the superman. if I want to go DC universe as villain then I will choose Doomsday. Man I love his power & look that awesome. Please Please don't drop it 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

4.6 for now I want to see where this is going and I expect the mc to show his power and not hide them like every mc from isekai anime. ...

I don't know if the author is just writing for the sake of writing because I find the idea interesting, but I'll give my honest opinion here. I will list what I thought was good and what I thought was bad. The author's idea of ​​putting Doomsday in MHA is cool and creative and the grammar is good. These are the good points. The negative points is that the Author neglects reality a bit, as the MC goes out killing villains at night, and makes sure he never has eyewitnesses, cameras etc that could have caught him, which honestly, surely would, not to mention that there are heroes like the academy director who is super smart, and the hero who can see into the future, these two could very easily figure out who the MC is because of how sloppy he is when hunting villains. The author's point is probably to put the MC to fight, but he could have done it in a much better and original way, because going out at night to fight villains has in many MHA fan-fics. Second negative point, there's a lot of miss information about the world background and about the character personality/histor.y We don't know the MC's personality, what he was like or what he is really like, he goes out to kill villains like he's going out for hot dogs, no explanation on how he can do it without feeling guilt or remorse, we don't know his past and nothing about what he was/is and how that might have influenced in his new life choices, And there are also some TAGS missing in the fan-fic, like Romance, and MHA AU, because the world he's in is an AU, it's important to put that, because the author simply decided to put Momo and the MC in the same school as Bakugou and Midoriya , and without the AU Tag, it just left readers confused, because if it weren't for AU, Momo and probably the MC would go to the rich school that Momo attended in the original timeline. Basically, the idea is interesting, but the author seems to be too focused on just developing the story and has forgotten a lot of important details, or he just doesn't care, which is normal when writing a fan-fic.

Good story so far and I'm interested in how this story will turn out, but I don't want Mc to look doomsday. if you're going to have him look him then I have designed of doomsday I kinda like.

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before i start i have few questions.will the mc hide his strength for some bs reasons and is the mc good or evil or neutral and finally will there be any romance .

Great story so far, good grammar, and an original concept when it comes to the powers chosen. Only thing I would change is the spacing bewteen sentences, dont know if it’s just me but when you put a ton of sentences together to form these long paragraphs, I tend to get easily distracted and not very interested in reading all of what’s there. Maybe put 2-4 sentences together then space them out, overall great story.

I like the writing, but the story (in my opinion) is set up so that the story will be quite short. I'll of course change that rating if this ever becomes multiverss but I can't really look into the future. character design is nice, and I like how hes trating humans a bit like the actual dday. there hasn't really been much background so far but, well... there's only 3 chapters so yeah. it's a 4.4-4.6 for me

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I just wanted to personally give myself a rating now that really reflects my opinion, this won't go to in depth but I'll try to cover the review points. Writing Quality: I personally think that I've done pretty well so far grammatically. I haven't seen any major mistakes being pointed out so far and I started dividing the paragraphs so that it's better to read. So yeah I'd give myself a 5/5 there. Stability of Updates: I try to upload once every week and I think the last update is the first time I messed that up and that was due to medical reasons, so I'd say 5/5 is fitting there aswell. Story Development: This is very opinionated but I'd say that a 4/5 fits it. I think that I haven't created any plot holes so far and the timeline is progressing pretty well in my opinion. Character Design: I honestly feel pretty good about the mc's character developement, and I do try to show any changes in his personality or life in general. World Background: This is honestly a 3/5 max... I haven't really done with the world's backround, kinda just expecting that everyone knows mha but I'll try to show some societal aspects from now on. Like the discrimination and such. Anyways yeah that's it. I think 4.4 fits it ok, while I did wish for it to be better... I'll do another review after the 20th chapter or so where I'll hopefully get World Backround to a 4/5 at least. Thanks for reading :)

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