Review Detail of Whadyamean in Harry Potter with Technology System

Writing Quality 4/5 Update Stability 5/5 Story Development 1/5 Character Design 2/5 World Background 3/5 Stopped at chapter 121 so I REALLY know what I’m talking about. If you can’t bother to read the rest of this review, I would not read this, it’s a long, ardous story where barely anything happens in a chapter. You’ll have to sift around the oftentimes meaningless dialogue to find anything of importance or substance, and even them it’s drip fed to you as it takes 30 chapters for anything important to happen, and it’s stretched out during those chapters. A tone that feels more dead and depressing than a rotting corpse sorounded by flies and seems less inspired than an office workers commute to work. I loathe that I read up to chapter 121 as it was a therough waste of time. From a pure punctuation and sentence structure standpoint this story is perfect. However everything else is flawed. You can really feel that a chapter is updated every day and that the author has to stretch oht the chapters to meet some minimum word quoata they have to fill before releasing one. The story DRAGS forever. Nothing goes nowhere for 10 chapters at a time. You get knowledge, learn what Harrys doing, but nothing of significance or story development occurs for 2 sentences at a time. Even at chapter 100, that’s right chapter 100 your still in the prologue, there’s no conflict. The snail pace of the story can be mostly attributed to Nigel, the Technology System’s AI. He never shuts up about anything. About 1/4-1/3 of the text in a chaoter can be attributed to Nigel’s dry banter with Harry that gets boring after you figure out the formula of, something of minimal importance happens, Nigel interrupts the flow of the story to say something that most of the time is just filler and unfunny jokes, Harry responds and acts like what Nugel said is insightful, yet oftentimes is something like in chapter 121 where he literally stretches out the phrase, “don’t step on Daphne’s toes” to a 2-3 sentence dialogue where Nigel’s boring, dry, unchanging, robotic attitude sounds liek Harrys facing a dragon and needs to focus. Then Harry goes, “of course it would sure be a rather unfortunate occasion if that were to happen”. This exchange takes up about 1/5-1/4 of the chaoter, and this is a short example. Moving on from the horrendous pace there’s literally no character development. The only oen to receive anything even regarding that is Aunt Petunia, but the author messed it up by making the tone all methodical and serious despite clearly wanting to make a loving and warn atmosphere. The author struggles to understand that when you want to make Harry seem like he’s a actually happy or satisfied you have to move away from the 4-5 sylable words that make me feel like I’m in the presence of a robot who’s only goal in life is to research and learn. And even then they struggle to do that. The cause, like multiple other struggling authors, being not following the fundemental rule of Show Don’t Tell. They constantly say what’s happening and the result than including any of the sensations or emotions Harry feels. I would not read this again, I actually wish I never read it, it’s an unispired story filled with uninspired actions that make you feel like it’s building up to something, drawing you in. But it will never come to fruition, or when it does it won’t matter as we’d be in chapter 2,500 considering it took 100 chapters to finally make it to the trill. It’s a slow methotical story made to keep your attention and waste your time. I actually struggle to understand if this was made out of enjoyment with how lifeless and empty it feels once you look past the fancy words and attempts at humour that fall flatter than a board and dryer than dirt. This is a waste of time don’t read it, the only reason this isn’t at a 2 or 1 star review is that it’s grammatically correct and its updates are stable. Everything else is bad, but it’s ironic that the story about technology and AI assistance feels like it was made by one that dosen’t understand pacing or humour.