This is very good lots of detail in world building and good characters the only problem I have is that the dialogue is a bit of. They just speak in a way no one actually would, I get it’s a fantasy world but it’s just weirdly unnatural. Other than that everything is well done and great work so far.
TempestNotion
Le gusta a personas 3
me gustayeh I know dialogues are a bit off and doesn't reflect the emotions but to be honest author is uploading 2 chapters everyday it's really difficult to maintain the quality.even the professional writers would struggle to keep up with such a pace. respect to the author for they are capable of doing it
Idontcarereally:The description before speech is slightly odd aswell just feels off. But maybe it’s just me