I am not a good I in writing reviews but let's some up basics. writing quality: full marks. I mean I ain't a English professor and by my standards the quality of your writing is good. But try to focus on breaking paragraphs into 2 two three sentences only. Story development: This lacks a bit of imagination. I don't know why but most of the actions of MC looks kinda forced. character design: I hate super perfectionist or Gary Stu type of characters but your character clearly looks realistic with a personality. update stability: good. world background: Best part of the story. It is far better to describe world as the story progress than dump everything at start.
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me gustaThank you. I'll try reviewing to see why the MC's actions look forced. I'm not sure if you're referring to his fight with Bolton but the truth was Bolton wanted a fight from the beginning for plot purposes further down the line which is why he bothered the MC until he got it. Not sure if that's what you're referring to