Review Detail of Helldragon_xd in Strike The Sun!

The characters are well-written and world design is great. Some issues I would focus on is the character texts could use slightly better formatting and the tempo of revealing information. This is just my personal preferance, when you talked about the mutations that occurred from the sun I think revealing that humans have also developed powers in chapter one serves the story's pacing better. You can add more information like how it might be very rare to occur, and then Allen managing to develop one is like winning a lottery or something. I think also telling how Allen plans to destroy the sun, aside from having flame powers, should also be elaborated in chapter 2. It's just my view on it though, the story overall is still written well.