Story wise I think it is really good but a bit predictable. There is a nice flow but the grammar needs some work. This has the potential for some intense drama. The main thing lacking is just experience as a writer but you have got the skill for it, so I know as you keep on writing you are just going to get better and better.👍🏿✌🏿
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