KingPablo
I only post my books when I have a completed version so bear with me🙏🏿 I love writing fantasy and eroticas. Follow me Twitter https://twitter.com/UjiKingPablo?t=jIsXq9EY2AfKmZBMs1HwgQ&s=09
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This is dope. As someone who isn't immersed in romantic books I ended up wanting to see more of this teenage love play out. Strange way to lose virginity but understandable and mixed with the emotions it is very real. Use of prose is on point with only room to grow, no downsides about the writing style. The plot is simple and yet capturing, I just love it. Thanks author for this, keep going fam.
Story wise I think you have something going on, you have good imagination so I know you definitely got magic. You need some polishing tho, I get confused sometimes because of the grammar and writing style. For the a first timer in this genre, you have got something. I know this is going to be dope going forward.