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UndeadProgenitor
UndeadProgenitorLv143yr
2020-12-22 19:02

Two words to describe this ff. It’s “hot trash” the mc looks like he has no mind of his own as he kills a god just because he was ordered to. What’s worse the god was living a humble life as a “mortal”. Then let’s not foget about the plot holes. The author just loves skipping the places that would’ve needed a bit of detail. no character development....we don’t know anything about the mc. Mc doesnt seem like he has learned any other moves other then the first three at the beginning of this ff. Those are just one of the few flaws of this ff. Read at your own risk.

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scias85
scias85Lv7

thanks for the heads up

UndeadProgenitor
UndeadProgenitorLv14

Uh huh

scias85:thanks for the heads up
GIGATOON_Studio
GIGATOON_StudioLv1

should you the X-men in harem list rouge kitty.....

GIGATOON_Studio
GIGATOON_StudioLv1

also emma frost

UndeadBeing
UndeadBeingLv12

It’s not a harem thankfully, author too lazy to remove the tags. Would’ve ruined the dynamic of dc bringing a terrible plot device

GIGATOON_Studio:also emma frost
Lc_The_Second
Lc_The_SecondLv4

Well. I lost interest in reading it when 1) It has been too long without updates. 2) When the author is so lazy that he prefers to write no-harem in the synopses and that he's not going to take out the harem tag yet because he's too lazy.

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DerangedPirate
DerangedPirateLv5

Read Chapter one and chapter one only. While I most definetely am not an authority or knowledgeble on how reincarnation and karma should function, I don't believe this is the best way to go about it. The first issue I have with this is that somehow the acts of curing a disease and a virus counts towards his karma instead of the person who actually preformed those miracles (the girlfriend of the MC). Makes zero sense to me. He did not save her life, he did not inspire her to do so or aid her in the process of finding cures. He basically did f*ck all. Conclusion; People who preform acts that could infuence karma negatively or positively should have their own karma negatively or positively changed. The boyfriend(MC) of the person who actually preformed the acts of great renown in this case should recieve zilch, nothing, nada. The second ''Issue'' is more personal dislike orientated, though illogical decision making/missed opportunities (in my oppinion) plays a part; The 4 Wishes. The first wish makes him akin to Ban for Nanatsu no Taizai obviously. In other words superhuman, speed, strength and immortality. Dont understand why you didn't just frame the first wish like; I want the abilities of Ban from NNTZ with a change, that change being endless mental stamina instead of Bans {Snatch} ability but Ok. Would be more concice. So far no real issues here. The second wish is to my knowledge is exactly the same as Ultra instinct from DBZ Super or Observation Haki from One piece. Again If you framed it out like this it would be more concise. No real issues yet, so far so good. The third wish is mainly why I'm typing this review; ''A body with a fast healing factor like wolverine'' Made from Vibranium. I'm not an expert on NNTZ or Ban but I am damn sure Ban can near instantaneously heal from just about anything, Asking for another healing factor is completely redundant. The 2nd part of the 3rd Wish; A body made from vibranium, in my eyes is the same as wishing for a near indestructible body. If you want an indestructible body why not wish for armament haki without the ''seawater/water weakness'' from One Piece? It would go with the general theme of the second wish and complement each other. Unlike vibranium, armament haki can continue to evolve and strengthen. Also unlike a vibranium body Haki has many offensive capabilities aswell besides just having a body that's ''hard as steel'' and thus hurting significantly more when attacking. The only limit being mental fortitude and willpower but since you already made the MC ask for near limitless mental stamina I doubt this is a limit in the first place. If he did ask for armament haki he might aswell have asked for all 3 forms of haki without the seawater/water weakness in a singular wish, as the second wish. This would save him a wish (the 3rd Wish) and considering this ''God'' only had a slight objection towards the final wish I doubt he would disagree on the condition that the MC had to train and learn haki himself. This would give him something to works towards, instead of an instant near invulnerability from damage. It would also unlock a new avenue of growth and abilities, that being conqueror's Haki. The applications of wich could only be hindered by your own creativity. Conclusion; Wasted opportunities, illogical decision making.

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