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Simeon_Classic
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So far i liked the story but it help you made the story slow down. How about adding more dialogue. Maybe describe the second character more. and maybe use ( when i got to school) instead of " fast forward to school" all and all i think this story is not a bad start.

Pregnant with the mafia boys baby

Miyonna_Wooten

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Simeon_Classic
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thanks for the advice!! : )

Miyonna_Wooten:Thanks so Much For The Advice!!
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Thanks so Much For The Advice!!