Review Detail of BRPever in Origin Master

Okay, let me be honest here. The writing needs a lot of improvement. The sentences are long, and there are a lot of punctuations missing. The tone is straightforward and has little flow. BUT THAT'S THE ONLY BAD PART HERE!!!! If you go beyond the writing quality, you will find an amazing story. The characters and world are well and show's writer's passion on the work. Amazing, keep up the work and keep on improving. :)