I have the same criticism as pro but on top of that you made your mc insainly op (not cool little to no character growth because of that you shuld have made his race be the thing that evolves rather than just gain a **** ton of op abiltys and make that evolve) Your the novel gets real confusing you I don’t quite understand what world I thought you were doing record of ragnarock but it seems you sent him to rwby over used btw Also reading your novel gave me a headache I read it all but ima be honest man use return a little more to separate sentences more as it’s like you just filled almost all the page with words it hurts
TheDragonKing32
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me gustaThat might change due to some Stuff i have planned for the future so there will probably Be no harem in the AU Version
Pathetic_Uchiha:is the harm supposed to be harem cause I don't read harem and I just want to make sure to know what I'm going through cause it says harm on your tags and I don't want to take the risk
Hmm fate stay night mixed with records of ragnarock would be interesting That way you can have both wifus the fighting and the servant fighting XD
TheDragonKing32:Thanks for the criticism man I’ll try my best and the current arc is where I’m experimenting with character development and perhaps he’ll visit record of rangnarok or when I’m finished or want to I’ll make a record of ragnarok fan fic
That would be interesting but I would have to do some more reading to understand the fate series a bit more but thanks also since you considered yourself a pro any recommendations on your best books that I could read
CliffkunLolRekt:Hmm fate stay night mixed with records of ragnarock would be interesting That way you can have both wifus the fighting and the servant fighting XD
is the harm supposed to be harem cause I don't read harem and I just want to make sure to know what I'm going through cause it says harm on your tags and I don't want to take the risk
TheDragonKing32:That would be interesting but I would have to do some more reading to understand the fate series a bit more but thanks also since you considered yourself a pro any recommendations on your best books that I could read