Very poor grammar makes this story very hard to read. Frequent repeats within sentences and misused pronouns. Word choice is basic. Narrative is poor from the exposition. With the absolute minimum characterization given, one would at least think the plot would move fast, but it is a crawl. By the point in the story I gave up I found nothing of interest.
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