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2019-04-17 06:00

The story has a good potential but : 1. there's one word missing every 2 paragraph 2. The MC is supposed to be an assassin who was bettrayed by his most trusted dude, so logically he should have basicaly no trust left in others but now he met a random little homeless girl and he's like common now ur my little sis and his parents are okay, then this girl is revealed to be an absolute genuis cultivator. 3.He trust the little girl as if she is his love from his last life when he knew her for well less than 1 day. 4. His dad is the boss of the best familly but he make basic mistakes that even a 10 years old wouldn't make. Exemple: when his son give him some blueprint telling him that it's his master work, there's no questions like okay you have never leaved home but idk ur master or even WTF SOMEONE CAME INSIDE THE HOUSE AND I WASN'T EVEN AWARE well idk some logical response. Too many mistake for me dropped at like 20 chapters.

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